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Artists' Dreams

Star shimmered winds,
Constellations formed and destroyed,
On a background of velvet blue.

Russet orange waters,
Swirling upon the whims,
Of flitting fairies.

Black roses and red leaves,
Weeping tears,
Of glittering diamond dew drops.

The roar of birds,
The hum of bees,
Shattering the dawning,
Of a purple vapor ribbon sun.

Cross hatched trees,
Of charcoal,
With rainbow painted squirrels,
Cluttering their branches.

A cupcake,
With googly eyes,
A black and white striped tail,
And a mouth,
Used to eat itself.
After all,
Green chocolate,
Is irresistible.

These are the dreams of artists.



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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 20, 2013 at 5:36 pm
You are an Imagist in the making. This poem has the qualities of Amy Lowell. I love you attention to details. Vivid.
 
SecretFlame replied...
Mar. 20, 2013 at 9:33 pm
Thank you :) that means a lot :)
 
savetheplanet said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 6:20 pm
It's very descriptive, I like it! :)
 
Rayne said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 1:43 pm
Very descriptive and great imagery!
 
SecretFlame replied...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 7:00 pm

Thanks!

 

 
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 2, 2011 at 12:26 am
This is beautiful! Your word choice was all so precise. I could definitely see everything you described. Keep writing! :)
 
MagicMan2011 said...
Sept. 12, 2011 at 7:36 pm

Very colorful! I can really see everything that is mentioned. Great job!

 

 
ItsAshMal This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 10:15 am

Your vocabulary in this poem creates gorgeous imagery, and I found myself smiling at it! The colors brought their own moods to each stanza, creating a pastiched effect that was truly lovely.

A couple of lines drew my attention negatively, though. I think that when you say "purple vapor ribbon sun," the beautiful and calming feelings  get lost behing the impossible imagery. Also, I feel like you could have left the last line off. Ending with "Green chocolate/ is irresisti... (more »)

 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 7:39 pm
Did you enter this in the 'Dreaming Contest'?  It's really random, but beautifully descriptive.  I love it!  Another excellent piece of work. :)
 
shadowrider replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 7:50 pm
Thank you, and yes I did enter this in the dreaming contest!
 
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 9:48 pm

I'm not sure what to say.

It's an interesting poem , and a very good one as well.

Your choice of words is impressive , and I love your last line :)

 
shadowrider replied...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 12:07 pm

Thanks

 

 
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