Artists' Dreams

July 24, 2011
By SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends


Star shimmered winds,
Constellations formed and destroyed,
On a background of velvet blue.

Russet orange waters,
Swirling upon the whims,
Of flitting fairies.

Black roses and red leaves,
Weeping tears,
Of glittering diamond dew drops.

The roar of birds,
The hum of bees,
Shattering the dawning,
Of a purple vapor ribbon sun.

Cross hatched trees,
Of charcoal,
With rainbow painted squirrels,
Cluttering their branches.

A cupcake,
With googly eyes,
A black and white striped tail,
And a mouth,
Used to eat itself.
After all,
Green chocolate,
Is irresistible.

These are the dreams of artists.


The author's comments:
I entered this in a contest on here, hope you like it! Please leave feedback!

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on Mar. 20 2013 at 9:33 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thank you :) that means a lot :)

Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 5:36 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

You are an Imagist in the making. This poem has the qualities of Amy Lowell. I love you attention to details. Vivid.

on Dec. 5 2011 at 6:20 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

It's very descriptive, I like it! :)

on Dec. 4 2011 at 7:00 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thanks!

 


Rayne GOLD said...
on Dec. 4 2011 at 1:43 pm
Rayne GOLD, Chippewa Falls, Wisconsin
17 articles 0 photos 46 comments
Very descriptive and great imagery!

on Oct. 2 2011 at 12:26 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

This is beautiful! Your word choice was all so precise. I could definitely see everything you described. Keep writing! :)

on Sep. 12 2011 at 7:36 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
5 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Very colorful! I can really see everything that is mentioned. Great job!

 


on Aug. 31 2011 at 10:15 am
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
8 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Your vocabulary in this poem creates gorgeous imagery, and I found myself smiling at it! The colors brought their own moods to each stanza, creating a pastiched effect that was truly lovely.

A couple of lines drew my attention negatively, though. I think that when you say "purple vapor ribbon sun," the beautiful and calming feelings  get lost behing the impossible imagery. Also, I feel like you could have left the last line off. Ending with "Green chocolate/ is irresistible" gives the poem an air of whimsy, while the title lets the reader know what is actually going on.


on Aug. 17 2011 at 7:50 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thank you, and yes I did enter this in the dreaming contest!

on Aug. 17 2011 at 7:39 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Did you enter this in the 'Dreaming Contest'?  It's really random, but beautifully descriptive.  I love it!  Another excellent piece of work. :)

on Aug. 6 2011 at 12:07 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thanks

 


on Aug. 5 2011 at 9:48 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
0 articles 0 photos 356 comments

Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

I'm not sure what to say.

It's an interesting poem , and a very good one as well.

Your choice of words is impressive , and I love your last line :)



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