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A Solitary Flame

I love you.
How can those words feel like ash in my mouth?
Embers on my tongue
that sinks into my heart
burning
burning
as smoke encompasses
those sugar-coated lies
melting away my last glimmer of hope
compassion thus destroyed
until I’m empty
trembling
cowering in
his wake
finally understanding
that dark abyss
they’ve know to call
loneliness.




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clairexaudrey This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 7:34 pm:
I think you should find a title that really encompasses the entirety of your message. It could even be one word that by definition means 'loneliness', 'burning', or something else that has to do with fire. I like the idea of solitude in the title but using 'a solitary flame' just sounds a little cliche and not as powerful as your poem.
 
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iHope said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 10:18 pm:
beautiful!
 
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