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There is Nothing Now

July 19, 2011
By poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh


She pulls the hair out of her head.
She cries in agony.
The pain is tearing at her heart.
But she is satisfied.

Can she not cope with reality?
Does she always fly away?
Can she never live in the present?
Does she have to be carried away?

The one who once was peaceful,
she cries out now in pain.

Never does she see
the people who adored her;

Who now sit in pain
watching all they see.

The steady mother
close at hand.

The father
ever patient.

But nothing touches this throbbing mass;
The twitching body.
Her heart is an unmovable stone.
There is nothing now.


The author's comments:
Here I have placed myself watching a possessed young woman.

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on Jul. 23 2011 at 1:32 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Thanks anything you want me to look at of yours??

on Jul. 23 2011 at 1:31 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Thanks so much!!!

The funny thing is, I don't even know what inspired me! It just came!


Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 1:07 pm
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
17 articles 5 photos 339 comments

Favorite Quote:
*beepbeep*
"Where to, Miss?"
"To the stars."

This gave me chills. You did a brilliant job!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 7:34 am
inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
41 articles 1 photo 160 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I knew where poems came from, I'd go there"




- Michael Langley, 'Staying Alive'

I really like this! Personally, I think that it's one of the best you've written

on Jul. 22 2011 at 9:20 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Thanks soooooooo much!!!!! Yeah, I did the spacing different on purpose!!! I do strange thing like that some times! My stile I guess!!!! Anything you want me to look at of your?

on Jul. 22 2011 at 9:01 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

This is a good poem - I love how you describe the person and her loved ones watching in pain. The form (i.e. spacing between lines) didn't seem consistent, but that's the only negative thing I can think of. The topics you choose are so interesting! Keep it up!

on Jul. 22 2011 at 5:33 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Here is my newest poem. I really would appreciate knowing what you all think of it!!!!!