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Stranger

July 18, 2011
By savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.


I try to smile
It won’t come
And all the while
I feel numb

The hurt I feel
Burns a hole in my heart
Can this be real?
It’s tearing me apart

Your words are empty
There’s no trust
The end of the party
It all went bust

I stare at you
This stranger in front me
This isn’t who I knew
Where could she be?

I tried to make you happy
It always failed
Left me feeling crappy
You just bailed

Now I’ve given up
Our time fade away
Keep your empty cup
You’ll have to pay



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on Aug. 9 2011 at 6:26 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Hey thanks. :D No text lingo in this one but a couple of grammatical mistakes.  And no you're not weird, you just have different tastes.

on Aug. 9 2011 at 6:04 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

I see you stopped writing in text lingo, ignore parts of my first two comments, in that case :) 

I don't quite like this poem as much as your others, but I'm just weird :) And everyone else likes it. 

You're a really good writer, savetheplanet, don't let anyone tell you otherwise. I've very much enjoyed reading all of your poems. 


on Aug. 9 2011 at 12:07 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

It wasn't so much of a threat as was meant to be slightly resentful.

on Aug. 9 2011 at 11:39 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I rather like this! And I'm a little able to relate to it, so that gave it even more meaning for me.

The last line seems vaguely menacing. Is that how it's meant to be?


Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:48 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Exactly! So I just never bother. 

on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:46 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

ROFLZ me too! especially since to fix them you would have to delete the article and resubmit it

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:42 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

That doesn't seem like a grammar issue to me. 

It's all right.

On my poems, I find grammar errors all the time but only AFTER I publish them. 

It's my biggest pet peeve. 


Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:41 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Didn't realize that one. 

:)


on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:38 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Yah when I posted the poem I forgot to check for grammatical errors and I really regret that.  The other one was
"Our time fades away".

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 9:29 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

You have captured the feeling of unrequited love and heartbreak absolutely perfectly and gorgeously. 

Well done. :)

Just one error. 

"This stranger in front me"