Stuck and Unstuck Love MAG

July 18, 2011
By thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.


We were two birds stuck
On the wire between the telephone poles.
We were perched
Just far enough so our wings could not touch.
Sparks danced between us,
Sizzling on the electrical wire,
And all we could do was gaze
Into each other's beady eyes.

But when we did,
We felt like we were soaring
Above rooftops, and treetops, circling each other
But we were two birds stuck in love
On the wire between the telephone poles.
Our feet gripped and could not ungrip
We could not scoot closer,
We could not shift farther.

We looked at each other,
Sorrow in our black eyes
As we began to realize
There was no point in wasting time.
For we were two birds stuck in love
On the wire between the telephone poles.
Our talons grew tired from gripping,
Our hearts became weary of wishing,
And we little by little accepted the heartrending truth.
We could not scoot closer,
We could not shift farther.

Until one day,
A gusty wind came
And toppled our telephone poles
That had once held us in place.
We could stretch our talons.
We were two birds unstuck and free.

I flew and flew and flew away,
So shocked that I was unhandcuffed
Until I found you flew another way.
And it was with the freedom that the
wind finally gave
That I lost the love I had always meant
to save.


The author's comments:
This poem is about how you can really want something (or someone), but there is an obstacle that is blocking you from getting it. Then, by the time the obstacle is finally gone, you've forgotten, you have become distracted by something else, and you miss out on the opportunity you've always been waiting for.

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 41 comments.


on Aug. 8 2011 at 10:19 pm
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 252 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

You were right they were sort of similair! This piece was so...poectic and descriptive and metaphorical...All the things i love :)

on Aug. 4 2011 at 5:35 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Anytime!!!!! :))

on Aug. 3 2011 at 5:52 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

wow! Thank you ten times more! haha. That is so awesome. I'm glad you liked it so much! :)))

on Aug. 3 2011 at 5:14 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

You're welcome I favorited it!!!!! Keep writing!!!! :D

on Aug. 3 2011 at 5:12 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

You're welcome, I added it to faves!!!! Keep writing!!!! :))

on Aug. 3 2011 at 4:55 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Thanks so much!

on Aug. 3 2011 at 4:38 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

I really really like this I wish I had words to saay how much I liked this!!!!!!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 9:36 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Wow. This was very well-written and powerful! Even being about birds, methaphorically, I can relate much more than I'd expect to. Great job! :)

on Aug. 1 2011 at 2:02 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

Wow... That was amazing. Very, very relatable! All your metaphors were perfect and really added depth to the subject. Great job!

on Jul. 29 2011 at 5:01 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

yes, it's super metaphorical. It's a poem you really have to think about to understand. you can't just scan it over and get it! :)

Shadow878 GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 4:45 pm
Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
10 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven." Matthew 18:3

"Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men." JFK

“Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.”Albert Einstein

"I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else."
C. S. Lewis

"A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading."
C. S. Lewis

"Anyone who doesn’t believe in miracles is not a realist."
David Ben-Gurion

"An eye for an eye makes the world go blind" Gandi

Very good I have to say I the meaning went over my head until i looked at your explnaiton lol but that's just probably me.

iHannahJ GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 8:18 pm
iHannahJ GOLD, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
17 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I veiw myself on my intentions, the world veiws me on my actions."

I really like this!!!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 6:50 pm
HaleyDRog. GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
11 articles 14 photos 291 comments

Favorite Quote:
In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life. It goes on. -Robert Frost

This poem is amazing and the theme is incredible! I loved it. I can tell you really used your heart! Keep it up!

ams98 said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 6:41 pm
ams98, Brighton, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments
wow....i love the metaphor:) it is an awesome poem:) i cant wait to read more!

gigi01 GOLD said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:15 am
gigi01 GOLD, Seffner, Florida
17 articles 0 photos 64 comments
Wow.... very good... I especially like the last line... it perfectly ends it! Great job:)

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:06 am
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 388 comments
Loved the metaphor with the birds! "Just far enough so our wings cannot touch" - Such a relatable feeling. Good job!

on Jul. 21 2011 at 10:30 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
1 article 1 photo 250 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

I love the ending. Just astounding. really. 

leafy said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 8:26 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

i love this poem so much! my eyes are tearing up (well, actually, that's because my contacts are messing with me :) ). but still, its well written and you can feel the pain, even if it is coming out of a bird.

on Jul. 21 2011 at 8:25 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
1 article 0 photos 202 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

Aw, this is carefree in a way, yet sad. I know how you feel, although I haven't been able to get past the "obstacle" yet. ;)

on Jul. 21 2011 at 7:35 pm
CieraDesiree GOLD, Hagerstown, Indiana
17 articles 1 photo 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye only makes the whole world blind.
You never know what you have until it's gone.

Very Nice(:


SciArc

MacMillan Books

Aspiring Writer? Take Our Online Course!