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Whispers of the Northern Wind

July 19, 2011
By Kailey4 BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
Kailey4 BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
4 articles 3 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Né io pitorre" - Michelangelo


A wicked embrace of ice twists through the night, breaking through every inch of warmth in the forest and coats it with a sheet of fresh, substantial snow that quickly thickens on the hard ground. The stars, dim above the many pine trees, swarm the moon, giving off a bright white glow that echoes the snowy ground. They quietly rest atop the inclement weather as the mournful breeze moans around the shivering trees. The water that is frozen over secretly trickles underneath the ice, its unyielding pursuer; as an aura of extreme sadness.
This is the North.


The author's comments:
This was inspired by a trip through my snowy neighborhood woods during the harsh winter season.

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on Nov. 28 2011 at 4:45 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Kailey4, do you remember when I said that I don't really think I would bother to comment on your work because I'm not really a fan of free verse? Consider me humbled. I'm sorry. This imagry is amazing! I guess I needed to be put in my place at one point or another. Five Stars!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 1:37 am
white_chocolate97 BRONZE, Singapore, Other
1 article 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

This was so descriptive!! I really liked the imagery of this poem!

on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:57 pm
WhitleySienna, Ballymoney, Other
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
Wow I really like this!! It feels just like winter!!

on Jul. 25 2011 at 10:57 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

Oh so descriptive!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How grand ^^

on Jul. 24 2011 at 6:54 pm
Midnight_Hum SILVER, Hearne, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 48 comments
I like your descriptions but I think that the piece would have been more effective if you had spaced it out instead of leaving it one paragraph.  I think the spaces would have added a sense of pause that would have been nice and worked really well.

on Jul. 24 2011 at 6:18 pm
Bgeekgirl24 GOLD, Bellefontaine, Ohio
16 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
Eat healthy. Excersize daily. Die anyway.

I can really picture this. It is very good. *****

on Jul. 24 2011 at 3:00 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i really like this! its so beautiful and i really love the imagery! good job :)

kchy7 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 12:27 pm
kchy7 BRONZE, ParkHill, Oklahoma
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'when life gives you lemons, make grape juice. then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it.'

'don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footprints on the moon.'

wow. imagery was great!

it would also be really cool if you do The North with a metaphor with something to kinda tie it in and make it longer but it's good just how it is! :)


on Jul. 22 2011 at 10:47 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
1 article 0 photos 202 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

Wow, love your imagery and the flow of the poem. Great ending line!

BalletGirl98 said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 9:45 pm
BalletGirl98, Idabel, Oklahoma
0 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
The heart of the dance is the heart of the dancer.
~ Ghazallah al-Badriyyah

Very good. I could picture it!

on Jul. 22 2011 at 7:51 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Beautiful, just beautiful!  You have great imagery here. :)

on Jul. 22 2011 at 6:53 pm
WritingSpasms, Los Angeles, California
0 articles 0 photos 121 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Devils run when a good man goes to war."
- River Song from Doctor Who (Ep. A Good Man Goes to War)

I really liked it! The details were beautifully written. Also the last line finished it perfectly. Keep writing :)

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 3:59 pm
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 388 comments
Beautiful. The imagery was fantastic! And the last line was the perfect way to end it.

leafy said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 2:16 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

nice microfiction! great imagery and the mood is great. keep up the nice work!

on Jul. 22 2011 at 12:48 pm
torilynn400 GOLD, Poughkeepsie, New York
10 articles 1 photo 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only thing we have to fear, is fear itself."
-President Franklin Delano Roosevelt

Beautifully written. Great job!!

Kailey4 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:26 am
Kailey4 BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
4 articles 3 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Né io pitorre" - Michelangelo

Thank you all so much!! All the comments were very helpful:)

on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:16 am
SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM, New York, New York
27 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All conflict in literature is, in its simplest form, a struggle between good and evil." - unknown author.
"All that we see or seem
Is but a dream within a dream." - Edgar Allan Poe

Amazing! I could imagine it nicely and I love the descripton

on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:00 am
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had."

Loved the word choice and the description! I could really see everything in my head, which is a very good thing when you write! :D I love the last line, it just ends it on a very simple note and makes you happy. IDK why it does, I just liked the last line, a bit different style from all the rest of the piece.

on Jul. 22 2011 at 10:18 am
Leena7395 SILVER, Spring Grove, Illinois
8 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you are because those who matter don't mind, and those who mind don't matter.

wow, this is really great :) i could see a picture in  my head! wonderful job!

on Jul. 21 2011 at 11:32 pm
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Don't change the length. I just reread this and it actually works really well the way it is. 


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