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July 4, 2011
By AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
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He munches on his hay, reflecting.
Those eyes have seen and done the same for years.
And those eyes have lusted for adventure.
As he ponders this, he kicks up dust from the dirt floor
and nudges the stall door hopefully.
But wait- the door is unlocked,
as if the master knew his time at the barn was done.
The wind picked up and opened the door wide,
inviting for escape.
Uneasily, he steps forward and looks back at the hay.
He takes one last chew and then strolls out of the stall
and about the barn.
At last, he reaches the gate and looks into the distance.
Anxious to leave his master and
to see what lies beyond the gates of home,
He backs up and runs toward the barriers that had so long withheld him,
and jumps gallantly over them.
He stops once over and feels the breeze against his mane.
This is the last chance to go back.
But he mustn’t look back.
He raises his head proud,
the wind picking up his tawny mane,
and gallops into the night.


The author's comments:
I wrote this for my brother when he graduated from high school. This poem was inspired by a painting of a horse hanging in his room. It had the black outline of a horse running in strokes of all different colors. Incidentally, my brother's name also means "lover of horses."

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on Dec. 16 2011 at 6:28 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
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thanks again!! and yes he actually did lol was not expecting that. he doesn't usually express himself, but he said that it was "actually pretty good" which is quite the compliment from him haha

on Dec. 16 2011 at 6:18 pm
daniskate416 BRONZE, Bristol, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"To me, Fearless is living in spite of those things that scare you to death."-Taylor Swift

Aww Cat! This is so sweet! :D I bet your brother loved it

on Nov. 26 2011 at 3:45 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

You are really good at describing horses! I think it's really sweet how you related it to your brother (and cool that his name means lover of horses!) like that. In a sense, you know it's about a horse, yet it still works for people.

on Nov. 26 2011 at 12:24 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
17 articles 7 photos 131 comments
thank so much!!

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on Nov. 26 2011 at 12:15 pm
Wow. I love this poem! Great imagery!

on Nov. 5 2011 at 2:12 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
17 articles 7 photos 131 comments
is there anything in particular of yours you would like me to read?

on Nov. 5 2011 at 2:12 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
17 articles 7 photos 131 comments
thank you so much!! :D

Br33na GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2011 at 1:09 pm
Br33na GOLD, Dexter, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Life is beautiful, but sometimes we forget what Life is an mix it up* but life is Life, The most beautiful thing you can remember :) - Me <3

this is really good an truly shares what it feels like to leave home + reminds me of somthing my horsey Laredo would do :p hes a pain in the but smtimes :) but this is really good Keep writeing an I'll keep reading :)

on Aug. 27 2011 at 11:33 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
17 articles 7 photos 131 comments
Oh my gosh thank you so much!!! (again) :D

on Aug. 27 2011 at 11:28 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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ur really good at wriitting ! i love this one as well!

on Aug. 25 2011 at 5:12 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
17 articles 7 photos 131 comments
Thanks so much (again)!!!

on Aug. 25 2011 at 4:46 pm
snaomi PLATINUM, Cheshire, Connecticut
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I like this poem because at first glance, it's a relatively simple poem about horses, but if you look deeper, it also is a message about taking the chance when you have it, even if it means a risk (perfect metaphor for your brother's graduation)

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:11 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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I really like horses. This poem makes me think about how they might be feeling and that's really creative!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 10:16 pm
AlaskaFrost GOLD, Acushnet, Massachusetts
17 articles 7 photos 131 comments
Thanks again!!! :D

on Aug. 18 2011 at 11:57 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

I really liked this poem and I've always like stories about breaking away. Good job!


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