July 12, 2011
My free days are spent all alone.
I try too fill the fear

But it always fails.

I have everyone I need.

Its the one I want who I don't have.

Lonely days are filled with sound,
I turn up the music and let it take me.

I want someone too trust,
Share secrets with.

Why do I behave like this?
Because I'm scared?

It's the lack of trust.

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emanmkhan said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 1:33 pm
Wow. It felt as if I was feeling the mood of this poem. Nice way to end the poem. Five stars for you! :)
AllysonMarie replied...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 6:32 pm

Thank you so much!


NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 12:54 pm
This is the best of your poems. I like the lines "Lonely days are filled with sound. I turn up the music and let it take me." Again, a few small errors, but a good piece.
HaleyDRog. replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:08 pm
A few errors, but really good. Nice job!
AllysonMarie replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 3:58 pm
Thanks! I really appreciate the feed back! (:
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