Army Miracles

July 12, 2011
By firenrain GOLD, Belle Mead, New Jersey
firenrain GOLD, Belle Mead, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A room without books is like a body without a soul."

- Cicero

Roman author, orator, & politician (106 BC - 43 BC)


For most
When they look up at the sun,
It beams
And shines onto their faces
As light slips into the
Tiniest nooks
And crevices.

It takes its time until it
Finally
Slithers into their closed eyes
And turns their
Whole
World
Orange

But when I look up at the sun
I can’t help but
Look
The other
Way
And hope to see the soft silhouette
Of the faded but
Prominent,
Gray moon
Struggling to outshine the sun
When the sky is blue
And not tainted with
Darkness

At times when I do catch that
Effervescent moon
I know my father is in his army tent
Looking up at it too
Thinking that oddities
Can truly happen

But I know
What he really wishes
When he sees that
Silvery
Moon.

He longs
To come home,
Watch it with his daughter,
Laugh alongside her,
And say in unison
That miracles really do
Come along


The author's comments:
Army fathers find reassurance when they look up at the same sky their family is looking up at. I would know, my mother was a daughter of one.

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on Jan. 24 2014 at 7:27 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

Hey there, This is an amazing poem, though my father is not in the army, I have a frend who graduated two years ago, who is in the army. I miss him everyday,  I have yet to write him again though I have only wroten him only a few time. I understand what your going through or went through. I love this a lot.

on Jul. 25 2011 at 10:00 pm
LadyJaneGrey PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"I know it defies the law of gravity, but I never studied law." - Bugs Bunny

This was awesome. My dad was in the military, and I think you captured the emotions really well. 

on Jul. 24 2011 at 10:57 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

This is great, with wonderful description and a wonderful message! Amazing piece! You really struck home with me!

on Jul. 24 2011 at 3:44 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

this is so good, i really like it, its so emotional and moving, i'm sure your mom is very proud of this piece! good work! 5/5

on Jul. 21 2011 at 2:17 pm
white_chocolate97 BRONZE, Singapore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you'll land among the stars.

This was amazing!! I really liked the emotions you put into it and your word choice. Great work!!

on Jul. 21 2011 at 9:21 am
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

I believe I've already commented on this once before, but I still love it. :P You really need to get more up on the site!

on Jul. 21 2011 at 1:00 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Wow. This is very, very good. :) I honestly think it's amazing!!! I mean, it's so simple, yet the emotion you put into this really means something. I love it.

on Jul. 20 2011 at 8:33 pm
WritingSpasms, Los Angeles, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Devils run when a good man goes to war."
- River Song from Doctor Who (Ep. A Good Man Goes to War)

I really do like all the emotion you put into this. It's beautifully written and you were very descriptive. Keep it up :)

on Jul. 20 2011 at 7:45 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Very beautiful and very simple poem!  I love the emotions and the rhythm of it.  Excellent work! :)

firenrain GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 7:10 pm
firenrain GOLD, Belle Mead, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A room without books is like a body without a soul."

- Cicero

Roman author, orator, & politician (106 BC - 43 BC)

i never thought of the poem as song lyrics...now that you mention it i can hear some harmony playing inside my head when i read it lol :)

on Jul. 20 2011 at 2:22 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want. If it's something you'll regret in the morning, sleep late."

this is extremely powerful. and i love the word effervescent :) i also liked the rhythm. it was different and really cool to read. did you ever think about putting it to music?

on Jul. 18 2011 at 5:51 pm
youaretheinkandlifeisthepaper BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I want to unfold. I do not want to be folded anywhere, because there, where I am folded, I am a lie." Maggie Stiefvater

Wow this is really powerful and beautifully written. Love the simplicity, it really makes you think.

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:42 pm
vzimmerman PLATINUM, Ontario, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Happiness is the key to success, if you love what your doing you will be successful."

Taking about a family with a loved one in the army is great because so many people can relate to it. It really hits the heart. Great Job! Keep Writing:)

on Jul. 17 2011 at 3:38 pm
TheSilverLaurel GOLD, Goole, Other
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this is really emotional, and has a very deep meaning. Keep up the great work

kat2.0 SILVER said...
on Jul. 16 2011 at 6:47 pm
kat2.0 SILVER, Sparrowbush, New York
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Favorite Quote:
life is short so go for it

Really great poem it was very good especially the way it was spaced

on Jul. 16 2011 at 2:42 pm
YesThatsWhyTheyFly SILVER, Concord, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
'A house divided against itself cannot stand."-Abraham Lincoln

I really liked this poem. very good vocabulary!

poetry<3 said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 8:20 pm
nice feel annd flow to the poem. most importantly like the moral behind it :)

firenrain GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 8:12 pm
firenrain GOLD, Belle Mead, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A room without books is like a body without a soul."

- Cicero

Roman author, orator, & politician (106 BC - 43 BC)

aww that makes me feel a lot better about my work. i find myself agreeing with you, a lot more work on this website needs to be recognized!

on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:29 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had."

Love the description and message of the poem, very nice! I really liked you rhyming faces with crevices, I thought that was great and really creative!
I also loved how the story changed from a kind of happy feel about the sun to something serious, great tone change there as well. 

on Jul. 15 2011 at 9:29 am
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
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Really like this, alot! i have alot of people in my family that have served and still are its very touching :)


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