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The Ocean Waves to Me

July 10, 2011
By thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.


The ocean waves to me saying,
Hello, do you like the blues?
I bob my head to the beat saying,
Yes, I do do do do do.
I see palm trees swayin’ along
To the beach’s traditional song saying,
We like those tunes,
Too too too too too.

The cliffs rock the seashore
Asking us if we want to hear more
We bang our heads to the foamy strums
As tides crash onto the rock stars’ drums
The footprints left in the sand
Tap their toes along with band saying,
Oh yeah, Woo hoo hoo hoo hoo.

At the end of the day I was sad to see
The high tides of groupies leave
The spotlight was heading down beneath
The horizon, but that doesn’t mean
That the ocean’s dramatic melodies
Will ever stop playing under the sea

Before I go home from this harmonious place
I remember to put a few sand dollars into the musicians’ case
Making sure they know how much I appreciate
The talented entertainment of this date
I scoop up all the notes that I’ve heard today
Put them inside to stowaway
‘Til they come uncorked and start to play
Message for the next one who’s come to get away saying,
Now the ocean’s song is for
You you you you you.


The author's comments:
A day at the beach and I could not help but feel a rhythm. I got inspired by the sounds. Also, i put tons of play-on-words into this poem. I hope you can catch the double-meanings of words. I hope you enjoy this light-hearted poem!

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on Aug. 8 2011 at 2:09 pm
baaaaaaaaaab BRONZE, Clemmons, North Carolina
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This is a truly beautiful piece of work, the imagery is just amazing. I love the way you were able to put the whole feeling of rhythm into it, instead of just the rhythm itself. It, unlike many things I have read, does not seem forced at all. Keep up the great writing!

on Aug. 5 2011 at 10:18 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

You have a way of creating a beautiful and intricate image in my head. I loved the way it flowed so smoothly.

on Aug. 2 2011 at 10:18 pm
callmebaddog SILVER, Spokane, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever. Live as if you'll die today.
-James Dean

Very beautiful imagery! I love the detail, and the rythem put into this! Amazing :)!

BillM GOLD said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 8:07 pm
BillM GOLD, JACKSONVILLE, Florida
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Honestly I'm jealous.  You have some incredible work, and I'm excited to keep reading it.  I feel like you've really distinguished yourself as a writer here on TeenInk now and set yourself apart from the "whiny break-up teens" and are now a beautiful and rhythmic writer.  So pumped to read more!

on Aug. 1 2011 at 2:51 pm
WiseGirl BRONZE, Adams, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I think, therefore I am."
-Rene Decartes

I love this! It's amazing! Great job!

on Jul. 30 2011 at 10:50 am
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Thanks! :) I'm glad you caught onto some of the double meanings! I think that that's what makes the poem!

on Jul. 30 2011 at 9:55 am
Wearing_Westwood GOLD, Cary, North Carolina
18 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't think. Thinking is the enemy of creativity. It's self conscious, and anything self-conscious is lousy. You can't try to do things. You simply must do things. -Ray Bradbury

REALLY REEEEAAALLLYYY like this poem!!!!!! I love the double meanings and the internal rhyme in some stanzas.  keep writing!!!

on Jul. 27 2011 at 9:40 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

I put the ocean song's musical notes inside a corked bottle like a message- -in- a -bottle, so that the next one who find the note will hear the ocean's tunes too? Get it? :D Thank you so much! :)

on Jul. 27 2011 at 8:08 pm
corallee DIAMOND, Newport Coast, California
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The last stanza is beautiful! I love the humor with the "few sand dollars into musicans' case" line and how you expressed the desire to pack all that happiness away.

on Jul. 27 2011 at 8:57 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

LalaLOVE this :) It is so cute and fun to read. LOVE the play on words and double-meanings of words you incorporated. Great job! Keep writing :)

on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:27 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

EXCELLENT rhythm. Its so musical. And so jazzy! I dig. 

on Jul. 25 2011 at 9:30 am
TwasBrilling BRONZE, Staunton, Va, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The owl of Minerva spreads its wings only with the falling of the dusk" -H.W. Hegel

"Words are our most inexhaustable source of magic' -Albus Dumbledore

This is a really neat, playful poem! I like it!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 6:52 pm
HaleyDRog. GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
11 articles 14 photos 291 comments

Favorite Quote:
In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life. It goes on. -Robert Frost

This poem shows how much you love the beach. Great job!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 1:19 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

This was great! I could really feel the beat of the whole entire poem! Wonderful plays on words! AMAZING Job!

gigi01 GOLD said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:16 am
gigi01 GOLD, Seffner, Florida
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The repetition reminded me of waves crashing on the shoreline... very creative, with an upbeat, happy, playful tone... Great job!

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:08 am
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
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This is so cute! I loved how you used the repitition...it gave the poem a fantastic flow

leafy said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 8:40 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

i LOVE this, yet again. very whimsical, but not stupid. keep up the awesome work! 5/5

on Jul. 21 2011 at 8:30 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
1 article 0 photos 202 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

Very cute! Great word choice!

on Jul. 21 2011 at 7:06 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i really like it! the flow of the poem is really good  and i love the play-on-words! it seems like a song that would be played in the backround of somebody sitting on a beach looking out at the waves, i can see where you got inspiration! well done :)

on Jul. 21 2011 at 6:40 pm
littlelilith SILVER, Dallas, Texas
5 articles 1 photo 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your perspective may very well be the determining factor in whether you pass the test."

Hm....I feel like this could easily be a song. The rhythm was amazing, and the poem itself was really cute. Amazingly written. Good job! :)


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