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No Matter How Long You Search For Perfect

July 9, 2011
By thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.


He lay in his bed
Top hat still on his head,
Thought he needed water
But he called me instead,
He tapped on his brim and said,

Everyone has their ticks and tocks,
Their rusty bolts,
And creaky locks,
They have leaking pipes,
And holes in their socks

The hat on his head revealed
His last grays as he stuck it on mine,
He in his robe, our hands intertwined,
I patiently listened as he began to explain,

Look down the line
Of one’s ancestry,
Never find it perfectly,
Clean of all life’s miseries,
There is no medicine
To cure all of one’s needs,
Nor are machines’
Or robots’ work one hundred percent guaranteed,
Life is a continual rhythm,
Of break and repair - be ready,
No matter how long you search for perfect
You’ll never find a flawless man to marry,
All have problems within ourselves
To fix, but not independently,
Best you can do is find someone like me

He winked at me,
I nodded my head,
My heart skipped a beat,
What I thought an old man’s murmurs
Was a great epiphany,
Saved perfectly for me

Not long after that,
The genius man,
Strapping on his angel wings,
One hundred percent satisfaction guaranteed
For the one and only perfect place is where they will lead,
Took his leave.


The author's comments:
This poem is about the ever-lasting search for a purely perfect life. You will never find perfection. The moment that you cease trying to make everything in your life perfect is the moment that you will become content and at ease with your life. And your life may not be perfect, but you will have happiness. Hope you enjoy

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lissa_ GOLD said...
on Aug. 16 2012 at 12:07 pm
lissa_ GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
16 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't stand for something you'll fall for anything."- Suckerpunch
"The purpose of life is to be a better version of yourself."- Lucy Hale

I really like this! Your idea is really unique and the rhyming flows perfectly(ironically). haha keep writing!(:

KelliB GOLD said...
on Feb. 9 2012 at 12:02 pm
KelliB GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
15 articles 1 photo 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
Decide that you want it more than you are afraid of it.
- Bill Cosby

I totally understand the constant "need" to worry. About grades, relationships, extracurricular activities, classes, not sleeping because you are worrying too much. All of it. I understand. This touched me because of that. Great Job. I know you get this alot but would you read my poem, "Unlocked". I would enjoy your constructive opinion on it.

on Oct. 21 2011 at 6:55 pm
AbstractFragment GOLD, Dalmatia,, Pennsylvania
18 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know what it feels like when all your teeth are falling out really slowly and you don't realize and then you notice that, well, they're really far apart. And then one day... you don't have any teeth anymore." - Where the Wild Things Are

The ryhming in the first stanza seemed incredibly forced to me, but I absolutely loved the rest. You have a very nice sense of ryhthm friend.

on Oct. 20 2011 at 12:40 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
18 articles 17 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

THis was a great poem with an awesome message. You're absolutly right, we can't be perfect so we need to be at peace

leafy said...
on Sep. 13 2011 at 2:07 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

I loved thie, and the flow was great! 5/5

on Sep. 10 2011 at 5:36 pm
Regs_the_Shorty GOLD, Frankfort, Illinois
13 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are people who finish what they start and.....

ABSOLUTELY POSITEVELY PERFECT 5 STARS

on Sep. 1 2011 at 7:19 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

This instantly reminded me of the mad hatter! Genius imagery and wording, by the way. This, in my opinion, should be published, without a doubt. 

on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:16 pm
little-miss-mistakes GOLD, Plano, Texas
18 articles 2 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
even after all these years the sun has never said to the earth, you owe me... look at what a love like that can do, it can light up the sky

it also feels kinda suessy, which i think is awesome!

 


on Aug. 21 2011 at 10:15 pm
little-miss-mistakes GOLD, Plano, Texas
18 articles 2 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
even after all these years the sun has never said to the earth, you owe me... look at what a love like that can do, it can light up the sky

i loved the flow of this!! i thought it was cute and spunky and meaningful in a kind of way that anyone can relate too.... im also always a sucker for a poem that tells a story!!! good job!!

on Aug. 20 2011 at 1:06 pm
silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Imagination is the eye of the soul.
-Joseph Joubert
and
Clothes make the man. Naked people have little or no influence on society.
-Mark Twain ;P

wow wow wow you have a perfect feel flowing throughout the entire poem! this is awesome!

on Aug. 11 2011 at 7:47 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

You know, just from myself. i want everything to be perfect. i worry about school, always about my family, and other things that stress you out. One day i sat back and from all this stress i had built up, i wrote it out and into a story! :) thanks for readin it!

on Aug. 11 2011 at 7:31 pm
last-impression BRONZE, Sherwood, Arkansas
1 article 0 photos 3 comments
I love this. Where did you find the inspiration to write this?

Vidra PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 10 2011 at 12:09 pm
Vidra PLATINUM, Midlothian, Virginia
46 articles 17 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I write only because
There is a voice within me
That will not be still.”
-Sylvia Plath

Wow this is gorgeous! It's writtten so well and flows beautifully. Great job!

on Aug. 8 2011 at 10:29 pm
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 252 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

Elegantly written and with a strong message behind teh words which radiated as I read. Very nice

kat2.0 SILVER said...
on Aug. 8 2011 at 2:19 pm
kat2.0 SILVER, Sparrowbush, New York
5 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
life is short so go for it

it is amazing and it is very interesting to read

on Aug. 5 2011 at 11:38 am
OnAndieAvenue GOLD, Fowlerville, Michigan
17 articles 1 photo 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everyone who lives will someday die and die alone. "

This is stunning. I'm absolutely speechless. I'm glad you commented on my Grammar article. I'm glad I read this. It's genius; enlightening. I love your language and rhyming. Beautiful.

on Aug. 4 2011 at 7:10 pm
bEllAhOPe BRONZE, Houston, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Flying is simple... you just throw yourself at the ground and miss.\"

This is striking, in an excellent, poetic way. The message you sent was universal and tied in everything. I liked it quite a lot.

on Aug. 3 2011 at 4:41 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

That was amazing I loved it and the message!!!! :D

on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:32 am
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Thank YOU for reading it! :)

on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:39 am
MumblingMelanie DIAMOND, Jackson, Missouri
79 articles 0 photos 210 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't be a victim; be a titan.

This is absolute brilliance.

Thank you for writing it.



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