Finished

June 21, 2011
By kchy7 BRONZE, ParkHill, Oklahoma
kchy7 BRONZE, ParkHill, Oklahoma
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'when life gives you lemons, make grape juice. then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it.'

'don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footprints on the moon.'


You know I started writing today
I dug out all of your poems, every one of them unfinished
And thought, “What would these be like if you finished them?”
You never finished anything.

You know I started singing today.
Rambling out words to some make believe melody.
Forming tunes and pitches to your liking of course.
A merry go round feeling, there once again. And again. And again.

You know I started dancing today.
Bottling my emotions inside so the moves tell our story.
I hummed. Humming a song you started but never finished.
You never finished anything.

You know I started laughing today.
Laughing to a point of no return.

Forget everything when my insides are intoxicated by the rush of amusement.
Laughter is the best medicine. I’m allergic.

You know I started believing today.
Asking myself maybe it was fate.
Maybe, just maybe I was supposed to be away from you.
But friction pulls me back. Like a magnet.

You know I started smiling today.
Teeth breaking through lips to show the masked emotions.
Masked emotions that only you saw.
You wrote me poems once, remember? Like everything, though,
You never finished it.

The author's comments:
this was a writing assignment that i then entered in our city writing competition and won first place..

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on Dec. 24 2011 at 10:51 am
Butterflies93 BRONZE, Strafford, New Hampshire
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This is incredible. I love how there were separate things that "they" never finished. Nice Job! :)

on Aug. 7 2011 at 11:27 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

This is fantastic!

It's full of deep emotion and the words flow beautifully. I can see why you won first place. Keep it up!


on Aug. 7 2011 at 10:39 pm
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 252 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

I love this so much. I'm goign to favorite it. I see why you won first place teh poetry was beautiful, sad, elegant and just very powerful. You are very skilled at your work :) 

 


Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2011 at 11:52 am
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
17 articles 5 photos 340 comments

Favorite Quote:
*beepbeep*
"Where to, Miss?"
"To the stars."

=)

The different examples were really cool, and it just flowed nicely.....5/5.


on Jul. 22 2011 at 10:53 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
1 article 1 photo 250 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

AWW!~!!!! That was amazing!

on Jul. 14 2011 at 8:20 am
CieraDesiree GOLD, Hagerstown, Indiana
17 articles 1 photo 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
An eye for an eye only makes the whole world blind.
You never know what you have until it's gone.

I really like this. Good job=)

kchy7 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 13 2011 at 11:52 pm
kchy7 BRONZE, ParkHill, Oklahoma
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'when life gives you lemons, make grape juice. then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it.'

'don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footprints on the moon.'

thankyou so much! i really apprieciate it! & i hope the same too!

(:


austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2011 at 11:21 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

Wow! This is fantastic....I love it! I hope this gets into the magazine - it's great. :)

kchy7 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 13 2011 at 12:05 am
kchy7 BRONZE, ParkHill, Oklahoma
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'when life gives you lemons, make grape juice. then sit back and watch the world wonder how you did it.'

'don't tell me the sky's the limit when there are footprints on the moon.'

thank you very much! don't forget to tell other people about my work! (:

on Jul. 12 2011 at 9:21 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

I can see why this won first place!  The descriptions were excellent and the flow was flawless.  Great job!


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