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My demon came out today,
I stood in front of my father,

my loving father,

And it burst up my rib cage,
brushing it's needle feathers,

against my heart,

and clawed up my throat.

I could have forced it down,
swallowing it back,
deep inside me.

But, I didn’t.

I let it loose.
It looked through my mouth,

at my father,

and grinned.

It let loose a torrent,

of hot, acidic words,

That hit my father’s face,
and I watched.

He became a sculpture.

an ashen mask of disgust and disbelief and


His own child.
Hurting him.

I watched.
Like an onlooker watching,

a car accident.

I watched my demon smashing my father,


and I wanted to scream,


But, my demon retreated,
into my soul,

I felt it settle into it’s black home,

And I stood,

Sorry, Dad.

He shook his head,
the wounds
of my demon’s

lashing words,

Still raw, still bleeding.

I stuttered,
It was my demon, Dad.

He smiled,
eyes crinkling

and he looked so tired


He opened his mouth,

voice hoarse,
and whispered, shakily,

The demon is you.

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KimenSnow said...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 2:36 pm
This was written very well. I like your style.
Alon_Freevoice said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 4:55 am
This poem is very interesting and very emotional. It shows how we can lose our self-control sometimes... 
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:42 am
Yah, it's that moment when you just say something awful to someone you really love and then regret instantly. And thanks for reading!
NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 12:49 am
This is packed full of raw emotion and the struggle between the character and him/herself internally. Love it!
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:40 am
Thanks, NinjaGirl! Raw emotion is definately my thing.
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 12:37 am
Whoa. That ending was amazing! I don't know how or when this poem sucked me in, but it just did, which mean it must be pretty good. You let the readers feel the struggling emotion of the character. This is really amazing. :)
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:39 am
Thank you Garnet it means a lot! Yah, I try to convey my emotion instability into my poems by writing them when I'm upset. It is easier to write about it after it just happened you know?
Danealle said...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 7:15 pm
I like the style your showing here!
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:37 am
Thanks! I didn't know I had a style, though!
Megan.J.BThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 11:12 am
I liked this a lot! I agree with the comment about be subtle, it was nice. :) Very refreshing style too. 
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:03 am
Thank you, Megan.J.B.
JustAnotherOwl said...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 2:58 pm
This was wonderful! (: The emotion is great and I LOVE the way it isn't so...common. You didn't come right out and say what it was about, so it's not annoying in that way. (Yes, I do realize I make no sense). Anyway, beautiful!
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 5:44 pm
Haha, Owl, no sense makes sense to me! And subtlety is probably harder for teen writers, especially me! Thank you for reading!
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 9:01 pm
This is a great poem!  It shows how sometimes our words aren't our own when we're angry.  Good job! :)
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 9:59 am
Thank you! My dad and me are really tight, so little fights between us just set me off on writing rampages.
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