Black Thoughts

July 6, 2011
By ACannon BRONZE, Walker, Michigan
ACannon BRONZE, Walker, Michigan
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Black thoughts with a cherry tongue
Dip from your lips and swirl around
The crackling ventricles of my brain.
The pulse of your thumb,
Lingers inside of my wrist.
It is no coincidence each word of my thoughts
Mimics the syllabic rhythm of your potent beat.

Black thoughts with a cherry tongue--
Your bitter breath inside my ear
Damp, like the palms of my hands
As you tie me with your arms, like rope
A noose--
And the chair beneath me quivers.


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on Jul. 11 2011 at 6:34 pm
ReasonablyUnreasonable GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"You can't get more real than Heaven and Hell"- My dad

I like the flow of this. It paints a picture that I can't stop staring at. 

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on Jul. 11 2011 at 5:50 pm
jaygonz BRONZE, Hialeah Gardens, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Don't make someone a priority, when they only make you an option.

i like the personification <3 its good !

jaygonz BRONZE said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 5:49 pm
jaygonz BRONZE, Hialeah Gardens, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Don't make someone a priority, when they only make you an option.

i like the personification <3 its good !

on Jul. 11 2011 at 12:13 pm
You keep asking people to look at your poem, but you never tell them how to find it! In the future, please give more details. 

on Jul. 11 2011 at 11:10 am
ElleNicole BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"My role in society, or any artist's or poet's role, is to try and express what we all feel. Not to tell people how to feel. Not as a preacher, not as a leader, but as a reflection of us all."

This is good. =)

Check out my poem? I need more feedback as well.



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