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Tonight's Dream

July 5, 2011
By M.Lizeth GOLD, Santa Fe Springs, California
M.Lizeth GOLD, Santa Fe Springs, California
12 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
My heart is blind, that so it can love the soul that is too bright for the eyes to see.


Beneath the leaves
Of this solemn tree
I lay with you
And you with me

Upon your chest
I lay my head
And glance at the sky
That is now stained red

The sun is departing
And with her taking her light
A new moon takes her place
And stars come into sight

Then a whispering wind
Brings music to the site
We sit and listen
Like an ancient rite

From a mile away
A lone wolf howls
Warning his prey
That tonight he prowls

But nothing tonight
Will crumble my calm
Because here I feel safe
My hand in your palm

My eyes feel heavy
As midnight peeks
I feel your soft fingers
Stroke my cheek

I hear your heart’s beating
Like a lullaby in my ear
My mind begins to slur
And sleep draws near

Sometime in the night
While I dream of today
From you I hear a whisper
I love you, you say



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Emily.L GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 8:14 pm
Emily.L GOLD, Gilbert, Arizona
10 articles 12 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes, we just have to be happy with what people can offer us. Even if it's not what we want, at least it's something. " -Sarah Dessen

This was such a cute poem! I love the mixture of love and nature. Captivated me from the start :) I think I'll have to tag this as one of my faves for now...

Could you look at ANY 1 or 2 of my work and comment?

Thanks girl :)


on Jul. 20 2011 at 5:41 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
5 articles 3 photos 178 comments

This is a really pretty poem, very nice imagery[:

I think the end would be even prettier if instead of rhyming the last word, you just left a beat and then I love you. Meaning like..

"Sometime int he night

While I dream of today

From you I hear a whisper

 

I love you"

See what I mean? I don't know, just an idea. I'm still rather fond of it, good work[: