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Teeth Brushing

July 5, 2011
By JustEmily PLATINUM, Cicero, Indiana
JustEmily PLATINUM, Cicero, Indiana
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
That's HAWT!

A mini dishwasher inside my mouth
Scrub, scrub, scrub
My mouth is alive

Little teeth are saucers
Silently awaiting the rinse cycle
Rumble, Gurgle, Bubble
Sounds of the dishwasher

Furious bouts of water come
drowning the small dishes
The dishwasher fights to complete its mission
Swish, swish, swash, swish

The cycle is over
and the saucers are shining
The dishwasher celebrates by shutting down for the night
Only to be started up again
in the morning

The author's comments:
The assignment was to make the entire poem one big metaphor while incorporating the use of the onomatopoeia technique.

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on Jul. 14 2011 at 12:30 pm
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I like the : SPLAT!
Hahaha, very nice(:

on Jul. 14 2011 at 12:02 pm
RFrocker23 PLATINUM, Ballwin, Missouri
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This is really different! I like all the different sounds you incorporated.

on Jul. 12 2011 at 4:07 pm
PaRaNoRmAl627 GOLD, Mountainside, New Jersey
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aww! this is adorablee :)

on Jul. 10 2011 at 6:30 pm
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This is funny and cute! Good Job!

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