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The world inside my head (For want of better words)

Words chase each other around my head, blabbering, incoherent;
the half-formed heads of fairytale stories, never finished, never ending.
Wispy, like white eiderdown. Slowly floating to the bottom of my skull, there to stagnate in an eternal pool.
Occasionally, gravity reverses itself, they float up, towards the sunny-blue sky that is the top of my brunette head.
Together, the words solidify, and form stories, stories for you to read, stories for me to write.
Is your head the same?





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Little.Miss said...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 3:47 pm
This is pretty good... long lines, but other than that it was neat.
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Oct. 22, 2011 at 2:07 pm
Thanks for the comment :)
 
BrightBurningCampeador This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 2, 2011 at 7:08 pm
I love the words, especialy in the 5th line, but I think the lines are too long. The rhythm doesn't really make sense.
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Sept. 2, 2011 at 7:19 pm
Yeah, it's one of my older poems, I just posted it because my friend wanted to read it.
 
Stay_Strong said...
Sept. 1, 2011 at 8:31 am
:) I dont know what to say... this was awesome!! I <3 the descriptions
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Sept. 1, 2011 at 4:18 pm
Haha, Le hannon :D
 
savetheplanet said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 6:33 pm
Your head is quite interesting :)  I actually wrote a poem before reading this that has the same idea, the world inside my head called "Limitless" but it hasn't been posted to the website yet.
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 11:35 am

Thanks for the comment.

Haha, cool :)

 
savetheplanet replied...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 1:51 pm
Sorry I have to laugh, I had this strange vision of astronauts floating inside your head when gravity reverses. :D
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 4:24 pm
Eehehehe, that's hilarious, no apologies  needed :D
 
A_shy_dove said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 7:55 am
The use of metaphors in this poem is really awesome. And I would like to say that "my head is the same except the fairytale things...." Very good poem. 
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 11:23 am
Le Hannon, Dove, I am glad that you think so :)
 
YellowRose79 said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 3:40 pm
I like the description, very pretty. I agree!
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 3:45 pm
Thank you very much :)
 
Boosflash This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 8:19 pm
i do love the last line. and the title. but it is also that the whole poem is rockin. do your dance.
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 8:24 pm
Thankee kindly :) The dance shall be done, in the rain most of all.
 
Boosflash This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 6:59 pm
it is well my brothers
 
Aderes18 said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 7:14 pm

My head is. :) 

I really liked this by the way. 

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jul. 11, 2011 at 11:08 am
Thank you Aderes :)
 
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 5:34 pm

My dear Stargirl, he found it very much to his liking!

I have always known that wonderful things go on inside your head, but it was so good to be able to read the metaphysical laws which guide your mind's goings-on. And I think that the poem itself deserves far more than an 'eh;' I think it to be quite beautiful! I speak on behalf of all of your readers when I say that it's such a gift that gravity sometimes reverses itself in your head. When the absurd happens, there are a... (more »)

 
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