Empty Spaces

June 29, 2011
By silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Imagination is the eye of the soul.
-Joseph Joubert
and
Clothes make the man. Naked people have little or no influence on society.
-Mark Twain ;P


The corners of my mind are cluttered
With the Empty Spaces Your absence dotes
O Love! Where are your broken Chords?
The raging Galaxies in Your eyes haunt me
Delivering scars and soul-ghosts to bite at my mistaken misstep
No angels in the mists of old age taunt my gaze now
None but Your wicked, heartless halo
Which Atmosphere holds Your faith but mine and my Spirit?
Where are Your mercies and Your withdrawn love if not in my hands?
Thinks You I have room for Another?
Even the stars touch my sorrow
And weep
Do You not hear their pleas?
“Bring Your heart out of the empty Constellations of unbidden love
This Country is no place for the injured or lonely
Or lost…”
Do You not hear the Morning cry itself to sleep?
I hear…
Come, my Heart, come…



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on Aug. 14 2011 at 9:55 pm
silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Imagination is the eye of the soul.
-Joseph Joubert
and
Clothes make the man. Naked people have little or no influence on society.
-Mark Twain ;P

hey thanks for the comment :) i capitalized the words because i wanted them to be strong in the poem (almost like they were real places) so i capitalized them for effect

on Aug. 10 2011 at 7:47 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Wow. This was excellent! I love how it sounded like one of the pre-20th century classical poems, yet with modern diction. To be honest, the only little tiny piece that bothered me was the use of the words "Thinks you". Other than that though, everything was right on target!

on Aug. 10 2011 at 2:10 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

I love the flow of it. The way you write is... very poetic. :) (i can't think of how else to say it! lol) Why the capitalizations on random words? i get why you would the You and Yours, but i was just wondering.. it's not that important though! 

on Jul. 15 2011 at 2:33 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

This is a gorgeous piece! Great wording; it flows really well. You are very talented!!! :D


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