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Empty Spaces

The corners of my mind are cluttered
With the Empty Spaces Your absence dotes
O Love! Where are your broken Chords?
The raging Galaxies in Your eyes haunt me
Delivering scars and soul-ghosts to bite at my mistaken misstep
No angels in the mists of old age taunt my gaze now
None but Your wicked, heartless halo
Which Atmosphere holds Your faith but mine and my Spirit?
Where are Your mercies and Your withdrawn love if not in my hands?
Thinks You I have room for Another?
Even the stars touch my sorrow
And weep
Do You not hear their pleas?
“Bring Your heart out of the empty Constellations of unbidden love
This Country is no place for the injured or lonely
Or lost…”
Do You not hear the Morning cry itself to sleep?
I hear…
Come, my Heart, come…





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DeusExMachina said...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 7:47 pm
Wow. This was excellent! I love how it sounded like one of the pre-20th century classical poems, yet with modern diction. To be honest, the only little tiny piece that bothered me was the use of the words "Thinks you". Other than that though, everything was right on target!
 
thetruthawaits94 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 2:10 pm
I love the flow of it. The way you write is... very poetic. :) (i can't think of how else to say it! lol) Why the capitalizations on random words? i get why you would the You and Yours, but i was just wondering.. it's not that important though! 
 
silver_ice replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 9:55 pm
hey thanks for the comment :) i capitalized the words because i wanted them to be strong in the poem (almost like they were real places) so i capitalized them for effect
 
NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 2:33 pm
This is a gorgeous piece! Great wording; it flows really well. You are very talented!!! :D
 
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