Settling Dust

June 24, 2011
What's this?
Something in the world's amiss,
and I don't know what it is.

I'm just sitting here by myself,
watching the dust settle.

Breathing is easy,
when no one is watching.

So I'll close my eyes,
and you can walk away easily.

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Alon_Freevoice said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 12:44 am
Very emotional and I like your words... :)
Raytheraym replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 12:58 am
Thank you for so many comments! :)
hanging_girl_666 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 12:05 am
I love out of only a few lines and words, you make such powerful poems.
Raytheraym replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 12:33 am
Thank you for all the comments! :)
ritabelle511This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 12:40 pm
I really enjoy this poem, too! I like how you write with a simple style but it really makes your poems pop! Great job :)
Raytheraym replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 6:32 pm
Thanks so much!
Zinaidia said...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 5:40 pm
This is a unique poem, I don't see many couplets so this is rare. But it totally works. Good job! The emotion if very strong as well
Raytheraym replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 8:04 pm
Thank you! :)
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