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I thought I saw a star
At the corner of my eye.
Twinkling! Or was she crying?
But at that corner lied
A little Lightning-bug.

I thought I heard the angels,
But my heart had blocked the tune;
Then right I looked, and realized,
That you were in the room.
Humming to yourself.

I thought I felt your essence;
I thought I saw you, at the corner of my eye
I thought I heard your voice,
But that was all a lie –
It was all a dream.




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asofnowThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
today at 12:26 am:
Aw, so short and sweet and simple as well! Good job. that's what i like bout most poetry. Short, Sweet, Simple: the 3 S's there are exceptions always thou. I liked it. 
 
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Eirias said...
Jul. 26, 2012 at 7:05 am:
Sorry . . . I still like this a lot (it is the only piece I've seen taht I've given 2 five's to) but I'm not sure if it's really the best out there . . . If I'm only going to put one piece on my favorites, It's going to have to be head and shoulders above the rest. This is just a head taller.
 
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Eirias said...
Jul. 23, 2012 at 5:41 am:

This is amazing! I REALLY must be in a good mood today . . . As of yet, I haven't favorited anything, even if I like it a lot (which is pretty rare). I am sorely tempted to favorite this, but I will wait until another day, just to make sure it isn't just because I'm in an extraordinarily receptive mood right now.

So: a few critiques--

stanza 1 line 4: I don't like "lied." Perhaps "sat" or "buzzed" or something?

stanza 2 line 3: I don't like "right" because it could mean a... (more »)

 
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thetruthawaits94This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 7:17 pm:
I wish i knew exactly what this poem was about, but that is the writer's perspective I guess. you have a thing for stars, don't you? :) i noticed that in a lot of your poems you use the stars as metaphor or something like that! This is very... hmmm... how should I say this... poetic? It's great poetry though! :)
 
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