May 27, 2011
When I came out on the moon....
I never thought that I would win a heart.
You see the human far away....
From all the changing shapes.

But when I saw, and when I stayed,
Through all the changing colors.
I though all the happy days,
Would pass between.

I, crazed at a sight,
Struck friend and foe to the ground.
And when returned to me,
I saw a love of hate.

When I restored came out to greet,
The pretty face I missed.
It appeared to change, and gaze and look,
Away, far off from me.

I saw the burning light grow dim,
And anguish turning to hate.
I saw the twinkle of an eye,
And tears that gave me pain.

I saw a rose of purple pink,
Rushing in the light of day.
But never did I see the ones,
I miss now to this day.

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megsloveslions said...
Dec. 6, 2011 at 5:27 pm
Love the poem, love the imagery,  great work!
LoudDreamer replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 9:34 am
I can't help but agree with megsloveslions, the imagry in this poem is beyond amazing! I don't know why more people don't have imagry like this in their works, lack of talet? of creativity? I don't know, but you certainly did an awesome job. I love it out loud!
LifesIllusion said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 7:58 pm
AMAZING imagery. I can't get over how good this poem is:) Obviously if you can write with this good of attention to detail you are a skilled writer. Now will you check out my piece Beginning of the End? Thanks. Comment back:)
samiasaskia24 replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 8:03 pm
okay, thanks so much, I just looked at backwards mirrors and absolutetly loved it, but I'll look at the one you sujest here!
samiasaskia24 replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 8:05 pm
oh gosh i'm so sorry I totaly screwed up there. I thought you were someone els for a moment there!!! oh I'm embarised please forgive me!!!!!! Ah!
LifesIllusion replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 8:09 pm
Haha its okay! It's kinda hard to keep everyone straight on here. Lol
samiasaskia24 replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 8:22 pm
totally, with all the strange names I don't even pay atantion to them really!!!!!
dontforget This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 9:59 pm
Wow! This is really good! I love the abstract ideas within it!(:
Simplemelody said...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 5:57 pm
Excellent job with great imagery. Loved the poem great job. This poem also has a feeling of wonderment for some reason.
ritabelle511This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 8:51 pm
I really like this poem - I especially like your use of imagery and how it affects the overall message!
ams98 said...
Jul. 23, 2011 at 6:57 pm
That is really great....good job:) I really enjoyed it:)
kat2.0 said...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 12:10 pm
Your an incredible writer and this poem is outstanding
RFrocker23 said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 11:39 pm
You have a really beautiful way of writing. It's abstract but has this really clear message beneath it. Keep it up.
emanmkhan said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 7:24 am
You had me hooked to this!
samiasaskia24 replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 1:44 pm
thanks a lot!!!! Personally this is one of my favorite poems I've written in a long time! :) ;) i really like your stuff!!!
NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 8:39 pm
I don't really understand the first line... and keep in mind for future reference that you don't need punctuation at the end of every line. Other than that it's great. :)
samiasaskia24 replied...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 9:56 pm
yeah, I don't really understand the first line ether. It was just the way I discribed my feeling.
sophza replied...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 12:04 am
"When I came out on the moon...." could mean that you are in a new, unfamiliar, and kind of beautifully alien place. It made sense to me. By the way, awesome job!
inkblot13 said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 8:54 am
Oh my goodness! 12 stars out of 5! Really nice job!
samiasaskia24 replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 7:03 pm
Well thank you! I sometimes have these strange out bursts of feelings which come through poetry!
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