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Free of My Cage

May 14, 2011
By ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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I am caged.

Inside the cage, life is

Safe.
Secure.
Happy.

With no where to go.

But,

outside is another story.

Outside the cage, life is

Dangerous.
Wild.
Unpredictable.

It is vast,

endless.


I reach through,

the bars,

Yearning to be

out.


I am in a cage.
It protects me.

And

restricts me.

I grip the bars,

tightly.

Awaiting the day,

I am free,

But I know,

when that day comes,
I will be

reluctant.

Faltering,

for

the cage is all I know.

I will still,

turn,

towards the known,

And





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musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 5 2011 at 9:36 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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I <3 this it's great and creative I'm good at metaphors to maybe you could read some of my work five out of five stars
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Jul. 5 2011 at 8:05 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

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I find it helps to write it out by hand first (if you don't already).  You can also read it aloud to yourself; you'd be surprised how many errors you can find that way!  My family has heard me muttering under my breath several times and they already think I'm insane. :)  You could also post your work in the forums first and ask for critiques.  It helps to have another set of eyes looking at your work.
ArgonElement SILVER said...
on Jul. 5 2011 at 7:49 pm
ArgonElement SILVER, The Woodlands, Texas
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You are completely correct! Do you have any ideas how I can edit my work?

 

CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Jul. 5 2011 at 1:39 pm
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"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

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Okay, this is a great metaphor.  I like the format as well.  Only two criticisms:

1. 'No where' should be 'nowhere' because it is a compound word.

2.  Did you mean "I will still turn towards the unknown..."?  Because the character is leaving, they're going to the unknown, right?