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Ambush, Escapade, Desolation (With No Girl Would I Rather Be)

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Time passes by
If this is supposed to help heal my wounds,
it’s failing.

Three weeks now
Was it?
Three weeks or so.

She broke up with me
And then you moved.
She upped and left me
So did you.

What’s worse?
The pain of her absence
Or the fact that yours hurts me less?

You’re my father
What a bother
That we should be closer, and
Get together more.
Charlotte, North Carolina
600 miles away
I’m here in Fowlerville, Michigan.

Fowlerville, Michigan,
One and a half miles away
She’s stuck with me, here to stay

Stuck by me
To trouble me so
With heartache, longing
Crap to my soul.

One and a half miles away
Her heart is still right by mine
Even as she pulls away
I feel this love, still; deep, divine.

Why does she pull?
Why does she pull away?

What is best for us both?
I still yet disagree
That a break-up is what’s best
For her
And me.

What is best for me?
Moving on is more troublesome
Then if I were to just let me be;
Then if I were to just linger,
Melancholy

Your moving should be making this harder.
Barely, Father.

Still, I am drained only by the absence of her touch.
Her hand in mine…
Her lips on mine…
Her willing loving heart, loving so divine

Necessary To me,
Is her breath
Breathing in mine as I breathe in hers, too,
Faces close
Lovers closer
Closer than the beautiful petals to their stem
The stem to his leaves
Or its roots.

“She is essential to my being,”
My happiness is aware
And he also knows that he would not exist
If she were never there.

If she leaves, forever,
Permanently
I’m alone in this world.

Desolate.

Where is she?

What of when she said I was all that could make her happy?
What about when she told me that the thought of life without me
Just made her sick?
What about those times when I felt that she was neglecting me
Only to learn that that thought was pissing her off
Because, in all truth,
She was actually only trying to get me
To follow her off?

Somewhere in some other land
Our brains would always be.
Lovers,
In a great, fun adventure,

With no girl would I rather be.

With no girl would I rather be.



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remembermeplzThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 4:55 pm:

I like it! I dont usally read long poem like this one but it just drew me in,Im sorry you had to go through that but then again you probally wouldnt be the same person you are today,would you? I dont know.hahah off topic!

anyways amazing poem =)

 
Mudder_Hacky replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 1:06 pm :

haha actually it's because in my e-mail it says "A reader has commented on your article" sent at the same time as "Someone has replied to your comment" and "New rating for your article" and "N****** M**** C. (in case u don't want ur name out here) has contributed to TeenInk"... yeah.

see, i asked TeenInk to email me when u contribute, thinking that it'd just send me emails when u post compositions, but it actually sends me an email everytime u comment, which i think is kind of creepy, ... (more »)

 
remembermeplzThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 5:27 pm :
haha sureee you are ;)
 
Mudder_Hacky replied...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 9:52 pm :
ha xD ;)   
 
remembermeplzThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 10:48 pm :
hehe XD      
 
Mudder_Hacky replied...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 3:04 pm :

rmplz, this convo is running low!!! it's been going on for so long; i do not wish it to go!!!

QUICK - FIND SOMETHING NEW to talk about, we must...

btw, i've tried friending u on fb recently, but, well... for starters, ur name is pretty common to begin with...

 
remembermeplzThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 9:25 am :

yeah it is running low...

and I notice that u posted that coment on july 17Th.and I just now got an email about it.

Im so sorry.

and I dont have a fb,that might be why you cant find me...

and Natalie is common??

Beavers...we should talk about beavers

 
Mudder_Hacky replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 12:23 pm :

funny that the same thing should happen to me... i just haven't been on email much at all lately... sorry :///

 

anyways, so, yeah,  beavers... I LOVE THE BEAVER IN NARNIA!!! He's so funny, and he makes beavers look cute...

i just have to say that over all of that little group of mammals, my favorite is the raccoon. i love their little mask faces...

 

p.s. yeah, i really know quite a few natalie's... like three or so, i think..

 
Mudder_Hacky replied...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 12:24 pm :
NATALIE!!! WE'RE VIP's!!! :DDD
 
remembermeplzThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 3:50 pm :

its okay =)

hahaha he does! I havnt seen that movie in forever!they are really cute..(the raccoons)

yeah I know about 5 XD

OHMIGOSH I KNOW!I dont know why...but we are =D

 

 
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Mudder_Hacky said...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 12:42 pm:

Ha! it's funny to read this now because NOW i am happier with another girl! and the original girl who i wrote about in this poem, i am now happy to say, is COMPLETELY out of my life!!!

hahaha.. oh boy...

 
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