Brown Days

On brown days I feel warm
like a house
full of love and warmth
and fresh baked
chocolate chip cookies
on a snowy winter day





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Robyn97 said...
Jul. 25, 2011 at 12:07 pm
If all of these are class assignments, I wish I had that class. ;)
 
Alon_Freevoice said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 2:59 am
kudos to you! I don't know if I would ever be writing something good as this given it was just an assignment?

Oh, when did I even make assignments? LOL..

Anyway, I really like this. :)
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 3:16 am
thanks it means alot
 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 9:24 pm
This was a nice, simple poem. The only criticism I have is that using 'warm' and 'warmth' was a little bit redundant. But hey, what do I know about poems?
 
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 1:21 am
thanks i love to hear feedback positive or negative
 
ritabelle511This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 7:06 pm
Yum - chocolate chip cookies :) Short and simple poem - nice!
 
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 1:22 am
whe i wrote this one i was thinking of gooey warm mlt in ur mouth chocolate hip cookies that u make with ur mom and grandma and leave em on a tray come back and they're gon mmmmmm
 
JoPepper said...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 2:33 pm
That was good short and to the point I like poems like that! Great job!!!!
 
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 6:54 pm

thanks

 

 
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 11:29 am
You're welcome!!!!!!!
 
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