May 11, 2011
I feel them
like a bird's wings
flapping inside me
waiting to burst
with the
love, joy, passion, and energy
they had before
but i realize it is only
them sending me a
I an happy up here in heaven

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Hazel-daisy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 3:22 pm
i really like it, its really sweet :)
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 10:32 pm
thanks a lot :P
ttlove21 said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 12:53 am

Loved it sooo much i can relate ...i miss you


musicispassion replied...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 11:10 pm
how so? since i don't know who u r
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 2:18 pm
Great imagery, once again.  I know how you feel; my grandmother I was very close to passed away when I was ten and I still feel her near me.  My only criticism: you forgot to capitalize 'i'.
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 9:03 pm
thanks and i feel her with me always sorry about the mistake
sakina replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 12:45 am
It's a great poem...
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 1:00 pm
thank you !! :P
ritabelle511This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 7:10 pm
I love the imagery you have in all your poems! And I really like how you wrote this for your late great-grandma - I wrote one for mine as well!
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 1:20 am
don't u just love grandmas they're awesome they make the world go round along with crayons ninjas sesame street moms and sugar
JoPepper said...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 2:28 pm
That was so sweet I noticed two mistakes but nothing major: you put "an" instead of "am" and you forgot to capitalize the "I" one the eighth line.  Other than that really good!!!!! :))
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 6:54 pm
sorry thanks
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