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Memoir #67 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

I'd like to say we met at the homecoming dance
But my Sneakers squeaked too much
And he was too curious
Because Shoes make sounds that grate on nerves
In a way that lets you know they are here
I'd like to say that we both fell in love
Staring into each other's eyes as we passionately –
but he thought I was annoying and I had no time
for ones who did not appreciate my presence
Squeaky Shoes or otherwise
so a day passed and we saw each other in the hallway
me with my Shoes
and him with his unnerving stare
Personally, though, I felt attached
As if every passing glance or blink in
My direction meant the world to me and therefore
meant the world to him
I didn't understand the importance of dance
But it was important to him
and therefore important to me
And so with loud Sneakers that sang along with the music
and a dress that would much rather be paired with heels
I moved and danced and my friends
laughed and I
squeaked and he stared and looked away and stared
And I realized that prettygirls loved him and wasipretty?
But he paid no mind to prettygirls and walked to me
his shoes scuffled toward canary Sneakers
beckoning him with sounds that only Shoes can make
And we Danced and He Talked and Smiled and my
sneakers were less audible
Replaced by the beat of the music pounding
Within my chest.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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Annabel(author) said...
Jun. 1, 2012 at 10:30 pm:
Hi there! So I've been getting multiple notifications a day stating that I've been given 0 out of 5 stars. It's totally fine, and thanks for the rating anyway! I was wondering if the people giving me those specific ratings could send me some critique? I'd love to know what could be fixed with this piece :) Thank you!
 
willagrace replied...
today at 6:54 pm :
Honestly? I think the zero out of five thing might be a system fluke, because this is a realyl good poem. Lovely one to be put in the mag, too, so great job on that!
 
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Alexandrathepoet This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 8, 2011 at 5:01 pm:
I love this writing style, so personal, its fabulous!
 
Asharahy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 10:02 am :
thanks so much!
 
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