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Purple flowers
cascade over the casket
like a flood.
Purple was her favorite color,
my great-grandma, regal
but lighthearted.
Purple shines through the dark sea;
people wear treasured lavender necklaces
or amethyst bracelets to show respect.
Quiet voices, like bees humming softly,
buzzing through the stillness.
It was expected but sudden,
a booming storm sneaking up
in the dead of night.
Tearful hugs are shared with
bittersweet remembrances of
happier days, like the salty
jade pickles she loved so much.
I only wish I knew her better.
All the memories slip through
the cracks of my mind, hidden and
forgotten.



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ohmakemeover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 12:09 am:
I'm sure your grandmother would be so proud of you for writing such a heartfelt poem.  Purple is such an emotional color, and it makes wonderful symbolism.
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:28 am :
Thank you!
 
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Mariam.JThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 2:25 am:

Sorry, that was a mistake .

It's supposed to be 'your loss'.

 
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Mariam.JThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 2:25 am:

Wow, really heart felt.

Really liked it :')

And I'm sorry for you loss .

 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 1:29 pm :
Thanks very much for reading and commenting - and thanks for your condolences!
 
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Raytheraym said...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 5:46 pm:
Wow, wonderful! The emotion is so strong!
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 1:29 pm :
Thanks very much :)
 
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Eno-BladzThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 29, 2011 at 12:02 pm:
iloved reading this poem it was so full of emotion. i don't really like peotry but i do like this.
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 2:19 pm :
Thanks, Eno-Bladz! I'm not much for poetry either, but when the mood strikes me I get into it!
 
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JustAnotherOwl said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 7:25 pm:
This was beautiful and emotional. I loved it!
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 2:18 pm :
Thank you very much!
 
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Reader101 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:37 pm:
I really like this one... Even though it's sad I can feel the joy in it... :)
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 2:18 pm :
Thanks, Reader101!
 
Reader101 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 4:13 pm :
anytime! :)
 
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freeflow23 said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 3:16 pm:
This is my favorite poem of yours. It feels like your true emotions went into this.
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 2:17 pm :
They definitely did go into this piece. Thank you!
 
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NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 8:54 pm:
This is great :) You're very talented!
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jun. 23, 2011 at 2:01 pm :
Thank you! :)
 
Bill M. replied...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 2:48 pm :
Oh wow! Your most powerful poem I've read yet! Everything ties together so nicely and it makes it seem almost happy, even through the forgetfulness and sadness.  Awesome work.
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:10 pm :
Thanks, Bill! :)
 
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