Its So Hard To Write A Poem

April 24, 2011
By Iamonlyhuman SILVER, Spring Valley, Illinois
Iamonlyhuman SILVER, Spring Valley, Illinois
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Its hard writing a poem for me
Inspiration doesn't come easily
The words don't write themselves
Its up to me
A poem can make you laugh
or cry
or make you sad
For some, they can write poems in a second
Though for me
it takes more
Inspiration isn't next to me right now
So I apologize for wasting your time
But its hard to write a poem
As you can see
Maybe not for you but for me
Again, I am sorry for wasting your time
I apologize



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on Sep. 24 2011 at 6:17 pm
Iamonlyhuman SILVER, Spring Valley, Illinois
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Oh thank you. I'll keep your wishes in my thoughts when I write again.

on Sep. 4 2011 at 6:29 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

I saw someone use this method of feedback so I'll  try it. It's called Stars and Wishes. Stars being good things, and Wishes being things that I wish you hadn't done/changed/etc. :) Then I'll leave a summary at the end.

 

Stars: This was entertaining and funny. I like light hearted poetry sometimes, and this was very enjoyable. You rhyme so well it seems effortless. The line breaks were placed well in order to create a wonderful flow to this piece. The message was fun but hit true as well. Good blend of amusement and sincerity. 

 

Wishes: There are only a few things I could find that I wish you had done better. One of them was the uneven capitalization, some of the lines began with a capitalized letter while other didn't. Another problem was the lack of punctuation. There were no periods or commas. These errors are simple things that could be fixed with proof reading. In some poems it's fine to leave out the commas at the end of lines, and I think it was fine for yours, but you usually at least want to add a period at the end of the poem.

Sometimes putting a period at the end of complete thoughts as well makes it easier to read. I don't want to sound like an English teacher, but it's true. Though for this poem I think it's fine if you left out punctuation throughout the middle part. Perhaps add a bit more descriptive word choice. That's just a thought. :)

 

Overall: I definitely enjoyed this poem, and hope you create more like it. It was fun, and you could read it over and over again without getting tired of it. Keep up the good work! :)





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