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Oh Beautiful Rain

April 18, 2011
By sincere_red SILVER, Freehold, New Jersey
sincere_red SILVER, Freehold, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Every woman is wrong until she cries, then she's right, insantly"


Rain so pure
And innocent,
You make me
Feel alive.
I watch your
Majestic tears
Falling form
The sky,
And I can’t
Suddenly stop
From stripping off
My old worn shoes
And dancing in
Your beauty.
I can feel
The worried looks
From those around,
But all
I want is
To feel your soft
Caresses
As you,
Oh beautiful
Rain, poor down.



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on May. 14 2011 at 4:47 pm
FatesMistake13, Springerville, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Most people die of a sort of creeping common sense, and discover when it is too late that the only things one never regrets are one's mistakes." Oscar Wilde

"The books that the world calls immoral are books that show the world its own shame."

i meant smoothly not soomthly

on May. 14 2011 at 4:46 pm
FatesMistake13, Springerville, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Most people die of a sort of creeping common sense, and discover when it is too late that the only things one never regrets are one's mistakes." Oscar Wilde

"The books that the world calls immoral are books that show the world its own shame."

Like the two poeple who commented before me were soooo right. This flows so soomthly and i love the way you ended it. Beautiful written:)

on May. 14 2011 at 11:02 am
Express-- PLATINUM, River Vale, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is what happens while you're busy making other plans"







-John Lennon

Very well. I even think you should add to it a litle, becasuse I agree with sorlageal, it has a great flow;

on May. 13 2011 at 11:30 pm
Sorla_the_Space_Cowboy GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
“Sometimes if you want to see a change for the better, you have to take things into your own hands.” - Clint Eastwood
"I never lie. I believe everything I say, so it's not a lie." - Mark Wahlberg
"I just want to be pure"- Jim Carroll

wonderfully worded! It flows, so well.