Unwanted Rain This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

June 18, 2008
Rain struck the glass
smearing my face
smearing hers;
distorted mouth
twisted nose
smoky eyes
drops on the windowpane
the car pulls away
taking me with it
and leaving her

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Zelda2h2 said...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 11:15 am
Beautiful. Even though it's short, it's too the point and you can feel the emotion behind it.
Shahed said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 9:45 pm
Even thou its short but its worth reading! luv it!
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thesilverrose said...
Dec. 4, 2009 at 3:00 pm
Wonderful. Great work. There is almost like a whole story in those few lines. Keep up the good work!
LeilaniLives said...
Nov. 7, 2009 at 9:10 pm
rootbeerfloat92 said...
May 21, 2009 at 10:57 pm
I got the entire story in those few lines. I really liked everything about it; short and sweet.
Jayna J. said...
Feb. 20, 2009 at 7:11 am
I like how you put together the imagery of staring out a car window on a rainy day... Absolutely gorgeous.
Stormy15 said...
Dec. 26, 2008 at 8:07 pm
This is really short, to me it's to short not anoff time to really tell your story but still it was cute not great but cute ;)
conkiemonstar said...
Dec. 18, 2008 at 4:23 pm
Very nice
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