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Yellow Days

On yellow days I feel ecstatic
like a kitten anticipating
the feel of the yarn
between it's paws
on a hot summer day





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snaomi This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 10:10 pm
I really like this poem a lot.  It's very short but packs a nice punch.  I don't know if the last line is strictly necessary though - ending on the image of the kitten highlights the importance of the simile and gives a great visual
 
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 25, 2011 at 10:14 pm
thanks and as a part of the assignment we had to associate it with a season so...
 
MidnightFire said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 1:46 pm
My family adopted a stray cat so I definately know how a cat looks when with yarn :) you described it well
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 7:11 pm
thank u hope u love the cat :P
 
Alon_Freevoice said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 12:54 am
A few words yet powerful poem... :)
Keep writing!
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 1:39 am
thank you and i will never stop until i stop breathing
 
Finchy said...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 11:36 pm

Musicispassion

After reading both of your day poems, it's become clear that you're a cat person. I like the reoccurring theme that you are using, especially when incorporated into such a perfect simile as this one. I really enjoy reading your poetry; it's short, sweet, and, yet, very deep. 

Cheers

Finchy

 
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 1:15 am
thanks and thought i'd let u know i'm not one of those crazy cat people i have 2 cats
 
WritingSpasms said...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 3:00 pm
I love this one! The image is perfect and wonderfully written. Good job :)
 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 9:32 pm
Another great poem! I especially love the kitten simile. :)
 
alex198 said...
May 11, 2011 at 1:27 pm
Awww, I love it. Such a perfect image. It's short and simple but it gets across exactly what you're trying to say :) Well done!
 
musicispassion replied...
May 11, 2011 at 6:25 pm
thank you tell poeple about my poems plz
 
musicispassion replied...
May 13, 2011 at 12:25 pm
please comment i love to feedback positive or negative
 
iheartu replied...
May 13, 2011 at 8:31 pm
hey i love it its awesome
 
musicispassion replied...
May 13, 2011 at 9:44 pm
thak you so much
 
musicispassion said...
May 9, 2011 at 10:22 pm
anyone plz comment i love to hear feedback
 
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