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Gray Days

On gray days I am depressed
like a misguided ghost
traveling endlessly to find my
family
on a wet winter day





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TheSilverLaurel said...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 12:31 pm
it simple, and probably not the first similie i would think of, but it works. 5 stars.
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 2:48 pm
thanks i appreciate it
 
MidnightFire said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 11:06 am
I can definately picture this ... I'm a very visual person when it comes to reading and writing ... i see a faint outline of an old hobo like man (dont worry thats not you, it's just what i see when i think ghost and winter) trudging threw snow unable to see a few feet infront of him as a cold snowfilled blast of wind hit him.
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 12:23 pm
i kinds see it has that little girl with the matches have u ever read that story
 
MidnightFire replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 2:11 pm
no, i don't think i have
 
Alon_Freevoice said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 12:55 am
Indeed, another good poem of yours. I like your "Yellow Days."
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 1:38 am
thank you i'll look at some of your stuff
 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 9:29 pm
My only criticism for this poem is that the last line 'on a wet winter day' seems out of place. The simile with the ghost is quite sufficient to convey your emotions on a grey day.
 
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 1:11 am
i know but apart of the assignment was we had to put a place that went with the emotion and color
 
alex198 said...
May 11, 2011 at 1:32 pm
I actually like the shorter pieces. I think they're different and you're capable of creating strong images with so few lines which is a great skill and I'm not sure that would translate as well with a longer poem. I really liked this one too :D
 
musicispassion replied...
May 11, 2011 at 6:23 pm
thankyou i love hearing feedback especially when it's positive
 
musicispassion replied...
May 13, 2011 at 12:27 pm
please comment i love to hear feedback positive or negative
 
iheartu replied...
May 13, 2011 at 8:58 pm
LOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVVEEE IT you are crazy and fun but can have a deep side 
 
musicispassion replied...
May 13, 2011 at 9:43 pm

sweet thanks

 

 
musicispassion said...
May 9, 2011 at 10:21 pm

anyone plz comment i love to heatr feedback negative or positive

 

 
kate21 replied...
May 10, 2011 at 9:07 am
the thoughts behind your poems are very deep.. But maybe you should write bigger verses ..? Or maybe Culminate them or something.. I love what you're writing.. Just wish you could write more.. Hope that helps :)
 
musicispassion replied...
May 10, 2011 at 11:07 pm

thank you i know i write really short pieces i'm trying to write longer ones

 

 
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