April 2, 2011
You tell me I can't
you tell me I won't
you tell me don't ask
you act like a bloke
but I tell you
you better watch out
because your getting me really wound

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MidnightFire said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 10:55 am
Kids and adults alike are always doing that, but to our town! whats up with that? they are all like: Oh this place is a dump, this town is only filled with losers that will never leave and only make this town work. I say: well instead of complaning do something about it! ... my dad is the boss of a company that works with Microsoft, and does buisness world wide, and all from a tiny town were half the people say its trash and then do nothing ... so ya i know how this works :P
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 12:35 pm
wow thanks that's sounds interesting
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 2:16 pm
Great poem!  Yeah, I hope that no matter how much criticism I get, I will continue to pursue my dreams.  My only criticism: 'your' should be 'you're'.
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 9:01 pm
i agree no person is going to make me stop my dreams and they never will stop until the day i stop breathing
JoPepper said...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 2:38 pm
I reall liked it I favorited it!!!!! :D
musicispassion replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 1:08 am
thank you i'll look at some of ur stuff
vampier said...
May 13, 2011 at 7:55 am
that is so true i thank so and i loved your poem....!!
musicispassion replied...
May 13, 2011 at 12:28 pm
thank you tell people to check out my other poems
alex198 said...
May 11, 2011 at 1:35 pm
I liked the rhythm but I think your strength when you're writing is your imagery and this didn't put that across as well as your other poems did. I think this poem would need to be longer to help the reader understand where your coming fom. Hope that's helpful :)
musicispassion replied...
May 11, 2011 at 6:22 pm
it's very helpful thank you
musicispassion said...
May 9, 2011 at 10:20 pm
anyone plz comment i love to hear feed back
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