What's wrong?

April 7, 2011
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You remind me of him.
Frail bones,
to match a milky skin tone.
wild as fire,
but curls like the sea.
Rib above
rib above
hill above
rib, below.
A pleasant behavior,
a kind satin hand,
a chosen isolation
and forward mistrust.
Your teeth line up
like pieces of gum,
your faces,
much like elastic.
“Listen to this song,”
you both say.
“Listen to this song.
Tell me if you can
figure out what is wrong
with this world,
with this word,
with this guitar.”
What is w r o n g;
what i s wrong?

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jessicags said...
May 5, 2011 at 3:52 pm

elli, I really enjoyed reading your poem. What really was amazing was when I read it in my head I loved it but when I read  it out loud to myself its like the words jumped out of my house and exploded into fireworks. Great poem and I hope you keep on writing!


elliotearl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
May 6, 2011 at 7:55 pm
wow, thank you so much!!
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