Eternal Rest

April 2, 2011
Death is the only time
you get to rest without
missing a thing. Not even
a loved one. Your always with the ones you love. It's like going to bed eternally.

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Robyn97 said...
Jul. 25, 2011 at 12:04 pm
A serene way to look at it. Nice.
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 25, 2011 at 9:26 pm
it''s funny that u use the word serene it's similar to my name and it's meaning can u guess? thanks :P
Hazel-daisy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 3:26 pm
i really like it, its sad but good. In a way it makes me less afraid of dying, i like how a lot of you poems are short and simple but with a big meaning!
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 10:31 pm
thanks a lot i'm better at short pieces :P
Aftershock said...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 4:46 pm

This is good but I didn't like "Your always with the ones you love"

It feels rephrased. I love the first line, though

musicispassion replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 8:50 pm
thanks i like your username
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 2:14 pm
This is a great poem (once again!).  Yeah, someone I loved died, but she is still with me and will continue to be for as long as I love.  My only criticism is that the fourth line seems out of place because it's so long.
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 8:59 pm
thanks sorry i'm gonna look at some of your stuff
alex198 said...
May 11, 2011 at 1:38 pm
This was really sad but sweet. I really enjoyed reading it. You're a really talented writer :)
musicispassion replied...
May 11, 2011 at 6:21 pm
thank you  i'm glad you like it
musicispassion replied...
May 13, 2011 at 12:29 pm
please comment i love to hear feedback positive or negative
Purple-Licious said...
May 8, 2011 at 9:52 pm

i did you mentioned being a name known writer.thats a good career idea stick to it.btw i hope you know who this is lol



musicispassion replied...
May 9, 2011 at 9:17 pm
why thankyou and i do knowwho u are
Purple-Licious said...
May 8, 2011 at 8:21 pm
love this to u should think about posting your four metaphor on  here
musicispassion replied...
May 8, 2011 at 8:36 pm
I did it's pending approval fromt he editors. look atmy profile.
musicispassion said...
May 4, 2011 at 12:35 pm
plz comment!!!!!
life-and-music99 replied...
May 4, 2011 at 5:46 pm
This be the same person that wrote on your other post hahaha you know what "ren" you are sooo awesome
musicispassion replied...
May 4, 2011 at 9:27 pm
hahaha reesa your awesome to
musicispassion replied...
May 4, 2011 at 9:35 pm
anyone who reads this plz comment I love to hear feedback
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