The easy road

March 25, 2011
By Camii GOLD, Miami, Florida
Camii GOLD, Miami, Florida
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I could take the easy road
but it wouldn't take me where i want to go
I wouldn't have to walk so much
but I wouldn't end up where I want

I could take the short way
much easier now
but worse in the end
Wouldn't have to strive,
wouldn't even try
There would be nothing to fear
but there'd be no fulfill of my dreams
and I wouldn't achieve my goals

It's your choice,
will you take the easy road?



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Mcflyjr BRONZE said...
on Feb. 7 2012 at 10:06 pm
Mcflyjr BRONZE, Wilmington, Massachusetts
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Yeah I'm not gonna lie, the flow on this one is very haphazard, even for freeverse

on Oct. 18 2011 at 9:57 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

I agree that the flow could be better but I like the question at the end to your readers, its really good

on Jun. 17 2011 at 7:34 pm
russianreader BRONZE, Charlotte, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
"Good, better, best. Never let it rest. Until your good is better and your better is best."

hey yeh! no problem! i told u i would check out ur work cuz u looked at mine!!

Camii GOLD said...
on Jun. 17 2011 at 7:32 pm
Camii GOLD, Miami, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 75 comments
thanks for the advice :)

on Jun. 17 2011 at 12:06 pm
russianreader BRONZE, Charlotte, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
"Good, better, best. Never let it rest. Until your good is better and your better is best."

I like it, but I think you need to work on flow and making it maybe a bit more powerful and a smoother read.

Camii GOLD said...
on Jun. 1 2011 at 6:24 pm
Camii GOLD, Miami, Florida
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thanks! and thank you for the advice too!

poems take a lot of time to get published, so just be patient(:


SamiLou SILVER said...
on Jun. 1 2011 at 6:16 pm
SamiLou SILVER, Lee&#39s Summit, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagining the future is a kind of nostalgia"
-John Green (Looking For Alaska)

i really like the idea and the flow but maybe you can try changing up the organization of the stanzas? just a suggestion, but if you dont feel thats right than listen to your heart. I do love the message thought. Hey, i was wondering how long it takes for poems to be actually published on the site and not just the forum? Because i submitted a couple about 2 weeks ago and nothings happened yet

Camii GOLD said...
on May. 28 2011 at 2:25 pm
Camii GOLD, Miami, Florida
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thanks!! (: sure!

PJD17 SILVER said...
on Apr. 29 2011 at 8:45 pm
PJD17 SILVER, Belleville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
I do the best imatation of myself- Ben Folds

This is great keep it up i really enjoyed this  could you please check out and comment on my poem What if we were a Dream  i would really appreciate the feedback




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