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I could take the easy road
but it wouldn't take me where i want to go
I wouldn't have to walk so much
but I wouldn't end up where I want

I could take the short way
much easier now
but worse in the end
Wouldn't have to strive,
wouldn't even try
There would be nothing to fear
but there'd be no fulfill of my dreams
and I wouldn't achieve my goals

It's your choice,
will you take the easy road?




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Mcflyjr said...
Feb. 7, 2012 at 10:06 pm:
Yeah I'm not gonna lie, the flow on this one is very haphazard, even for freeverse
 
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RayBaytheDinosaur said...
Oct. 18, 2011 at 9:57 pm:
I agree that the flow could be better but I like the question at the end to your readers, its really good
 
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russianreader said...
Jun. 17, 2011 at 12:06 pm:
I like it, but I think you need to work on flow and making it maybe a bit more powerful and a smoother read.
 
Camii replied...
Jun. 17, 2011 at 7:32 pm :
thanks for the advice :)
 
russianreader replied...
Jun. 17, 2011 at 7:34 pm :
hey yeh! no problem! i told u i would check out ur work cuz u looked at mine!!
 
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SamiLouThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 6:16 pm:
i really like the idea and the flow but maybe you can try changing up the organization of the stanzas? just a suggestion, but if you dont feel thats right than listen to your heart. I do love the message thought. Hey, i was wondering how long it takes for poems to be actually published on the site and not just the forum? Because i submitted a couple about 2 weeks ago and nothings happened yet
 
Camii replied...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 6:24 pm :

thanks! and thank you for the advice too!

poems take a lot of time to get published, so just be patient(:

 
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PJD17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 8:45 pm:
This is great keep it up i really enjoyed this  could you please check out and comment on my poem What if we were a Dream  i would really appreciate the feedback
 
Camii replied...
May 28, 2011 at 2:25 pm :
thanks!! (: sure!
 
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