Step-fathers and -Daughters

March 25, 2011
By Live2Write PLATINUM, Ravensdale, Washington
Live2Write PLATINUM, Ravensdale, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Here's to waking up Thursday, and thinking it's Friday."
"It's Wednesday, dude."

"And we didn't think it was very cool, so... we tried to kill him."
"Dude, they're cops!"

"Great minds think alike."
"And fools seldom differ."


Know, this wasn’t the first time we’ve fought
Though, he seemed more emphatic, I thought

(He tended to say
In rigid display
“You never obey”
Not him, anyway)

He told me to feel things that I ought
But me, feel those things? I think not!

(I tried to ignore
The orders I bore
I noticed before
Yet results in more)

And still, he accuses me, distraught!
That my words are a personal shot?

(But please; I’m a teen
I’m not a machine
Designed to be mean
To someone so… keen)

Yeah, it’s true, we do argue a lot
Incessant battles, we both were caught

(And though he was mad
I only felt sad
Despite how he tried
He wasn’t my dad)


The author's comments:
Don't get me wrong; I love my stepdad. But he can be incredibly infuriating sometimes.

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on May. 3 2011 at 9:35 am
Live2Write PLATINUM, Ravensdale, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Here's to waking up Thursday, and thinking it's Friday."
"It's Wednesday, dude."

"And we didn't think it was very cool, so... we tried to kill him."
"Dude, they're cops!"

"Great minds think alike."
"And fools seldom differ."

Jeez, I thought I answered this! xP Sorry, lol.

My stepdad and I have an... interesting relationship. I wrote this poem for English, trying to figure out how I felt about it. Even though it does come off a bit negative. ^_^

Actually, I put that down as "know" for a reason: as in, "know that", but I couldn't put the 'that' because it would mess up the rhythm. xP

Thanks for the comment!


on Apr. 29 2011 at 4:19 pm
watermelon BRONZE, Miami, Florida
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I like the way you wrote about a topic I think others have had feelings about. I've never read about stepfather-daughter relationships in a poem. It's a very honest poem, and I like that. It's true to your feelings, even if it sounds harsh. That's something a lot of us have trouble fully describing: how we REALLY feel about it. One suggestion: the "know" at the beginning should be "no".


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