Recollections Withdrawn From a Tear Stained Memory.

March 13, 2011
I thought you were my friend
So I gave you the sun.
You took the flames
And burned my soul.

I thought you were my friend
So I gave you the ocean.
You took the salt
And sprinkled it in my wounds.

I thought you were my friend
So I gave you the wind.
You took the frigid gales
And extinguished my spirit.

I thought you were my friend
So I gave you my broken heart.
You took the two halves
And broke it once more.

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Writerforlife7423 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 6:29 pm
Beautiful, I totally know how you feel! My friends did the same thing to me and I wrote a poem out of it too! Would you mind checking it out? It's called 'Whispers' and I think you'll really be able to relate to it! Thanks! :)
LifesIllusion said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 8:24 am
Wow this is the third piece I have read from you and all I can say is, you have TALENT! Keep writing gril:)
taylee said...
Nov. 20, 2011 at 9:55 am
This was written very well. The imagery was amazing. I loved it. You should check out some of my work and tell me if you like any of it. Thanks! Kepp writing :)
CaeCae97 said...
Oct. 18, 2011 at 9:52 pm
I'm becoming a fan, Ill tell you that! What a saddening poem, though. But I still really like it. Keep writing!
SUNDRY said...
Sept. 8, 2011 at 6:34 am
Wow that was such a touching poem!! I cannot just express as to which extent do I admire  this poem because whatever adjectives that I would use would just be a glaring understatement!!!!!!! A question though- "How could you just write a meanigful poem inspite being afflicted with an emotional upheavel???'' Because for me I just need to have a right mood to conjure up a poem.
Book_addict said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 11:58 pm



Angeleyes12 said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 7:58 pm
Wow, i love the way you expressed this. It is beautiful
sunnyallday replied...
Aug. 13, 2011 at 12:36 pm
i agree :) its amazingg
writerfreak21231This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 23, 2011 at 9:06 pm
I fight with my friendds. and some times this is how i feel. It is really good! great job!
ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 7:49 pm
Lol thank you!
RhythmAndRhyme said...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 11:56 am
So simplistic, yet it speaks to me! Very well written nice job! :DDD
ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 9:26 am
Hahaha luv the :D's and thanks!
Warm_My_Heart said...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 12:48 am
This is beautiful. You write very deeply, and I like that.
ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 9:25 am
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Jun. 17, 2011 at 4:38 pm
Oh this is beautiful. You're one of those whisper-breath poets. Cool and clear, but surprisingly warm toned.
ExpRESsY0uRselF replied...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 10:52 am
Thank you, and I love that description of my writing...whisper-breath...nice!
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 12:31 pm
You're welcome, and thanks :)
ExpRESsY0uRselF said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 8:02 pm
I just wanted to say if anyone has anything they want me to check out, please let me know. :) I really appreciate all of your feedback, and would like to give you some if you want it.
HorseLover replied...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 6:26 am
I would love if you could check out some of my stuff! :)
ExpRESsY0uRselF replied...
Jun. 16, 2011 at 2:14 pm
Sure thing! Expect to hear from me soon! :)
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