Can You See Me, Dad? MAG

April 20, 2011
By Danny Shinost BRONZE, Worland, Wyoming
Danny Shinost BRONZE, Worland, Wyoming
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Dad, could you see me when I ran
Could you see me when I jumped?
Did you see me when I shot that buck?
Did you see me when I did the back flip?
Dad, did you see me get into a fight
Could you see me cry night after night?
Did you see me when I got jumped?
Dad, did you see me when I did drugs to
hide the pain
Dad, did you see me when I robbed
that house
Dad, did you see me when the drug dealer shot me
Did you see me, Dad, did you or did you
even look?
Of course not, your eyes were closed or
you were gone
Why didn’t you see me, Dad
Why weren’t you watching me, Dad
What happened I thought that you would match me, Dad
I thought that you loved me, Dad, I thought you cared
Why won’t you watch me now, why?
Dad, quit closing your eyes
Aren’t you going to watch me now?

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on Aug. 18 2013 at 12:19 pm
CatchAFallingStar PLATINUM, Pearland, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, it's yours, if it doesn't, it never was." - Unknown

This is amazing. I know these feelings all too well. My parents split up when I was barely two, and my dad has been in and out of my life ever since. I try to contact him, and for a while everything goes really well, and I'm reminded of the fact that I actually do love him. But then, out of no where, he'll just stop replying. Stop paying attention. Stop caring. At any rate, this poem means a lot to me and I want to thank you for writing this. It was beautifully done. :)

on Apr. 20 2013 at 8:59 pm
Gods-little-writer BRONZE, Springfield, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
light can't drive out darkness only darkness can do that, love cannot drive out hate only hate can do that.


Love this poem. I can feel the emotion in i. keep up the great work! your an amzing poem!

LaKayla SILVER said...
on Apr. 21 2011 at 3:51 pm
LaKayla SILVER, Savona, New York
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Favorite Quote:
to love is nothing, to be loved is something, to love and be loved is everything

I can totally relate to this. :) it has a lot of emotion into it

on Apr. 20 2011 at 2:40 pm
CrazyCricket BRONZE, Muskegon, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Dont mistake my kindness for weakness.-Lil Wyte"

I can relate to this so much. about 95%

Its amazing. Keep up the good work.:]


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