Shape Shifter

March 21, 2011
By ShivKeBab BRONZE, Plano, Texas
ShivKeBab BRONZE, Plano, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you're going through hell, keep going."
-Winston Churchill


First, you are creation.
What evil eye was cast upon me at the beginning?
Entering this vile land to the song of
“Succeed, fail, swim, drown, rise, fall…”
Know this; I am no Athena.
I didn’t spring forth from father’s wit,
But from mother’s wretchedness.
You have molded me to perfection in your eyes.
But for how long can you restrain me?

Shift.

Now you are judgment.
Your scales are weighted to one side
And the Lady Justice peeks from under her blindfold.
How could you bear down upon me
Your extensive wish list of perpetual desires?
For I have no great expectations.
To you, beauty is not in the eye of the beholder
But rather, beheld in only your fogged eye.
I mustn’t succumb, but I am slowly eroding.
I am stifled.

Shift.

Now you are disappointment.
My eyes fall with grief and shame
And no words can I speak.
All I can do is quiver under your burning gaze.
Why is it that I fail? Oh God, tell me why.
No matter how hard I try,
I will always fall in your eyes, won’t I?
Am I an Icarus who soars too high? No.
Because you are no Daedalus.
You want me to soar higher, and higher
Into the burning fires of the sun.
So commences my digression.

Shift.

But now, you are companionship.
An opal, that emanates its brilliance into shadow,
Leads me out of the Asphodel Meadows
As if it were the hand of Hermes.
There is a sense of passion and thrill with you
That I have never felt before.
But there is strangeness in your demeanor.
I can just see it,
Dawning above the horizon.
No longer are you the herald of Olympus,
But Hades’ ferryman.

Shift.

Now, you are betrayal.
The opal has turned into a multicolored ash.
Once immortal, now immoral,
Herr untreu, how you have fallen from your pedestal!
You dare have the audacity to deceive me?
The moon knows of your sins.
You share her coldness and crater filled exterior.
So collapses my so-called seraph, falling from grace.
I no longer stare into carnival mirrors.

Shift.

And now, you are annihilation.
Sitting in the darkness of winter,
My candle flickers and its wax melts down the side.
I am in anguish. The eyes no longer hold those two pinpricks of light
That once were the fruits of our affiliation.
Your demons are at the door.
I can hear them telling me to jump off the edge.
Only the sliver of warmth offered by that blessed candle
Keeps me safe.
I cannot adhere to that malicious taunting.
But behold! You have snuffed out my wick.

Shift…

And now I, I am but soil to this vile land.


The author's comments:
This poem was written for an oral presentation about Sylvia Plath for my English class. I attempted to write it in her style and the poem does reflect her life. However, the message I wanted to convey to readers is this: "You will constantly be judges by others, and there is no avoiding that. However, don't let them bring you down. Everyone is special in there own ways, and they live their own lives. So don't let anyone else except yourself run your life for you." I believe this poem is for the average high school student who may be lacking in one class or made some mistakes, and their parents may say some harsh things to them. They need to push all that negativity aside, and continue living their own lives.

One more thing. I also chose the picture of the woman at the oven to accompany this poem because Sylvia Plath ended her life by sticking her head in a gas oven after overdosing on sleeping pills.

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on Apr. 24 2011 at 8:16 pm
ShivKeBab BRONZE, Plano, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you're going through hell, keep going."
-Winston Churchill

Thanks for the comment! :) Well, I decided to scrap my presentation for English at the last minute and wrote this on the last night. So maybe, 4 1/2 hours?

fuyunohikari said...
on Apr. 24 2011 at 8:04 pm

This poem has officially taken the top spot on my list of 'poems by people who are alive'.

Really, it's amazing- the imagery, the repetition, the allusions...how long did this take???


on Apr. 23 2011 at 12:10 pm
This is an amazing poem, really. It clearly took into account her style and just everything she put into her poems. Amazing Job!

BlueFlame said...
on Apr. 21 2011 at 6:09 pm
This was such an amazing poem. It truly shows the essence of Sylvia Plath's life, and I love how you incorporated it for a teenager's life. This poetry is genius. I am impressed a teenager like yourself was able to produce something beyond extraordinary. I look forward to your future works!

theshi said...
on Apr. 21 2011 at 4:59 pm
So awe inspiring! Really love the work!

on Apr. 20 2011 at 10:08 pm
this is absolutely breathtaking.  well done, mr. patel.

PranavSheth said...
on Apr. 20 2011 at 9:46 pm
This is amazing

poetfanatic said...
on Apr. 20 2011 at 9:39 pm
You should be published in a book! We need more people like you to be published in ink! LOVE YOUR WORK. Its like amazing art. That I can stare at for hours and not get tired of. WOW. Man, I would really like to meet you... Delighted to have read this post!

on Apr. 20 2011 at 9:23 pm
wow...just WOW. this is beyond amazing. it truly touched me in every way. i can see the emotion in every word. a great message, and a brilliantly written work. keep it up!

on Apr. 20 2011 at 9:07 pm
ShivKeBab BRONZE, Plano, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you're going through hell, keep going."
-Winston Churchill

Thank you so much. It means so much to me! :)

on Apr. 20 2011 at 9:00 pm
ShivKeBab BRONZE, Plano, Texas
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you're going through hell, keep going."
-Winston Churchill

Thank you! It did take me a while to figure out what I exactly wanted to write, but in the end I got. Haha, then it just went on from there.

on Apr. 20 2011 at 8:59 pm
THIS IS POETIC GENIUS.

Magickless said...
on Apr. 20 2011 at 8:57 pm
Magickless, Plano, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you."-Ray Bradbury

Hmm, interesting. I like the Greek allusions a great deal.

The different stanzas are also pretty cohesive, despite the way that each represents a different characteristic. Great job on second person- I almost never get it to sound right, but this is a really good job of it.

I also really, really like the language in here- 'Once immortal, now immoral' and so on...

Nice job :]


poonjabi21 said...
on Apr. 20 2011 at 8:46 pm
This is soo amazing. I've never read anythign so amazing!!!


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