The Girl Inside.

March 13, 2011
By rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.


She is their doll
Their slave.
She is a mirror image of their motions
And follows them around like a hungry dog.
She hides under her thick mask of makeup and forced smiles.
But it is the girl inside
That was once my true best friend.
Now she’s at the other end of the cafeteria
Sitting beside the queen of the kingdom.
A cruel-hearted witch in designer’s clothing.
I on the other hand
Live in the land of the wandering minstrels and scholars
Our noses forever buried in books
Our premises overflowing with laughter.
But
I can see that look of longing when she spots me giggling along
To something that I actually find funny.
I can see that gleam of regret
When she notices how at ease we are at our lunch table.
And I can see that blush of shame
When we lock eyes for a quick moment.
Even though I don’t forgive the girl who snickers at me in the halls
I forgive the girl inside.



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Lonleydandy said...
on Apr. 17 2011 at 1:19 pm
I like it!

on Apr. 16 2011 at 5:46 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Hey guys, thanks for checking out my poem, but please please please comment and rate it while you're here. Thanks so much!

on Apr. 16 2011 at 5:43 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Thanks, I really worked hard to make those two last lines perfect! 8)

on Apr. 16 2011 at 5:43 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Thanks, but I owe it to the thesaurus! 8)

on Apr. 16 2011 at 3:44 pm
H0peF1ames BRONZE, Blaine, Minnesota
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This is a very touching and deep poem. I like the last two verses.

EmilyGrau GOLD said...
on Apr. 16 2011 at 1:36 pm
EmilyGrau GOLD, Jackson, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
We all have these things, that no one can see. They hold us down like anchors, they drown us out at sea.

Really good; nice vocab :]

 


on Apr. 16 2011 at 9:01 am
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Thanks, Debbie1. This was actually a true story, and I wrote this poem basically in tears after it happened to me. 8) But thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. 8)

Debbie1 SILVER said...
on Apr. 15 2011 at 9:42 pm
Debbie1 SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"As long as there is life, there is hope."

Wow! this poem was great! I really can relate, and i totally get what you mean!

on Apr. 15 2011 at 8:58 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Thanks so much BeatleMania16. Looking back, you're right, I could have made the spacing more creative. Sorry, this poem was the worst out of the 4 that I submitted, but funnily enough, this was the first one to earn approval. 8) Again, thanks for the feedback! I'll take your advice the next time I write a poem! 8)

on Apr. 15 2011 at 4:30 pm
BeatleMania16, A, Delaware
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hi, i loved this!! the idea is very relatable--in fact this thing basically happened to me...

 

i understand exactly what you mean in this poem. as for the feedback, i'm not great at this...but if i was you, i might add more creative spacing. some poems are fine just the way this is, but i thought this was a bit repetetive in spacing.


on Apr. 15 2011 at 1:11 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Hi guys, whoever reads this article, please please please rate it, or comment on it. I'm kind of desperate for feedback! Thanks so much!


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