Material Girls

March 9, 2011
By Beachgirl1 PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
Beachgirl1 PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
32 articles 4 photos 178 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If You Don't Fight Back, You've Already Lost."
"Don't suppress Laughter, it goes to your thighs."


I don’t see my friends anymore,
I see,
Their lip gloss,
Their hair straighteners,
Their eye shadow,
Their blush,
Their foundation,
Their eye-liner,
Their mascara,
Their everything,
But them.



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on Oct. 20 2011 at 11:12 am
Countrylife4 GOLD, Maine
11 articles 4 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Someday soon we're gonna catch that dream we've been chasing"
"Seven days without a horse makes one weak."
"The worst part of riding is when you dismount."

Insult my clothes, I say, “Okay, thanks for the compliment.”
Insult the way I look, I say, “Thanks for notifying me.”
Mock me and say riding isn’t a sport, and I’ll say,”You say that ’cause you can’t ride.” But before you make fun of my horse, make sure you have “911″ on your speed dial.

very relateable.....I think of my sister when I read this. :S

Keep on Writing! C:


on Apr. 14 2011 at 8:22 am
dontforget GOLD, Cortland, New York
15 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The best things in life are left unseen. That's why we close our eyes when we cry, kiss, and dream."

very relateable... and again, I love it:] I like how it's short and to the point. As a writer, personally, I would have described the friends with different adjectives than just all make-up to mix it up a bit. This is only because I don't consider make-up something that I would not see my friends anymore if they wore. (cause all my friends and I wear it) I would see it more as their attitude, and the amount of make-up...I don't, just a thought haha..anyways, good work

on Apr. 13 2011 at 9:17 pm
Beachgirl1 PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
32 articles 4 photos 178 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If You Don't Fight Back, You've Already Lost."
"Don't suppress Laughter, it goes to your thighs."

thats a great idea :) thnx!

XCLover GOLD said...
on Apr. 13 2011 at 8:59 pm
XCLover GOLD, Sandpoint, Idaho
18 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know I run like a girl, try and keep up!" ~Anon
"You only ever grow as a human being if you are outside your comfort zone." ~Percy Cerutti
"The hug is incomplete without you :3" NinjaMan

I don't know, I always consider punctuation in poetry to be whatever the author wants it to be. However, if I was writing this, I would have put a colon after "I see" just for a more emphasized pause before you get into the full flow of the other lines. Again, great job :D

on Apr. 10 2011 at 3:11 pm
Beachgirl1 PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
32 articles 4 photos 178 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If You Don't Fight Back, You've Already Lost."
"Don't suppress Laughter, it goes to your thighs."

thank you, and you are right, i will try not to use as much commas anymore!

on Apr. 10 2011 at 3:09 pm
TheCreepyNeighbor BRONZE, Plymouth, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
You know my name. Not my story.

I like this. The fast paced lines were unique and had a nice flow.

Again, you don't need comma;s after ever line. Also I think I see shouldn't have a line of it's own, it's kind of like a speed bump in the flow.



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