what creature has two hearts?

March 6, 2011
By killerdimmer GOLD, Metro Manila, Other
killerdimmer GOLD, Metro Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Let it be.


the rain wont stop falling
the lightning cant stop shaking my whole body from breaking.

my heart suddenly stops beating
and suddenly i noticed the stare youre giving me.

the look on your face made me cry
that look, i swear it could break a thousand hearts.

you broke me
you knew that.
you left me
you dont have to say it but i know you cant help it.

you broke us
i hope you knew that.
you left our chance
you stepped on it and threw it on my face.

what creature has two hearts?
you,
cause you took mine with you.



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on Aug. 6 2011 at 7:15 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

You can use apostrophes and you can still work with the flow. And regarding the last line, I think you should have used because instead of cause but it's okay anyway. :))

 

Same with your other poems, this one is good... Just a little work and it's great! :) Nyah!



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