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Broken Battlefield

It's just a mumble
but then it changes
it turns to shouting
and then to booming

there are cracks of pain
and a silent throb
suddenly the clouds
begin to slowly sob

ripping the dark sky
into many sized pieces
over and over again
strangely it doesn't show

calming and slowing
cushioned and healing
nobody even knowing
the actual truth



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Ballerina101 said...
Jul. 6, 2012 at 9:11 am
I'm so sorry that you had to go through that, but I do agree with the others.... your poem is very very good. I love this poem because i can relate to how you felt/feel, and i could also "see" what you saw. I love reading peoms where I can connect myself to not only the poem but also the author. Great Job!!! :)
 
wishonastar said...
Aug. 27, 2011 at 4:35 pm
I'm sorry you have/had to go through this. This is really good, though. Keep writing!
 
ErisRose said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 9:11 pm
I'm sorry you go through this with your family, but great poem! "suddenly the clouds begin to slowly sob" these lines are filled with so much imagery. amazing poem!! if you get a chance check out some of my poems and comment please:)
 
Little-Irish-Girl replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 4:10 pm
Thankyou so much. I promise I'll check out your work as soon as I can.
 
Izaac96 said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 4:52 pm
your reallly good...keep writting! definiletly!
 
Little-Irish-Girl replied...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 7:04 pm
Thanks. you made my day! :)
 
Anagam said...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 2:27 pm

I totally understand you :(

You are very talented! Never stop writing! I hope to be seeing more of your poems :) I hope everything gets better too :))))) And if you feel it doesn't just smile :))))))))) because there is time for sadness and time for everything.. the time for hapiness will come soon!! Don't lose hope!

 
Anagam replied...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 2:28 pm
Also if you have any free time what so ever please feel free to read/comment/rate/favorite any of my poems. Thanks :D
 
Little-Irish-Girl replied...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 2:32 pm
I will check out your work.
 
Anagam replied...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 9:11 am
Thank you :D
 
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