My Hero Has Zero Ego!

February 26, 2011
By Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."


When love comes, it doesn’t knock on a door
It walks right in, unexpectedly... And leaves no wonder or questions to ask anymore...
And when it decides to disappear, it leaves me broken dead, leaves my soul sore
You promised we will fly together in love, but I never left the floor
You lied; yes, I am blaming you... From now on, to your lies I am keeping a score!
Words with no actions, but verbs with echoes! Because my heart, you had, held, and tore!
“As if we were the only ones on an island”... but I stand alone as sand on a shore!
How am I supposed to forget you when you’re my inner core!!
Walking away, leaving nothing but your shadow...
You’re still a part of me... Although you left for what feels to be years ago!
I was your shining star, well now I no longer glow!
Wasn’t I your soul mate? And now I am the one you’d throw!
Our love was our own written fairy tale, except it didn’t go by the scenario
You’re alive... I am dead... You win I lose, Bravo!!


The author's comments:
This took me a while to write... took me courage to type... took me time to think.. took me hours with no blink.. I hope you like it, because it was deep!

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Shahed GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 12:23 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you so much! These are one of my favorite lines in this poem as well! :) Yes, I sure will check your work soon! Thank you again!

on Jul. 16 2011 at 4:28 pm
writingchick GOLD, Huntington, Indiana
11 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Faith is taking another step without seeing the entire staircase."

I loved the first couple lines! That Could have made a great poem by itself! It was a great hook! Good job. Check out my work??

Thanks and keep it up (:


Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 14 2011 at 10:15 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I saw the comment and I said wow this is long! but yea that happens its ok.

The usage of ".." indicates quotes said by the person this poem was written to, it's not unusual to quote phrases in a poem, it's just not common maybe.

Thank you for your comment I appricate it, and you!


on May. 14 2011 at 5:32 pm
OriginalCarbonation GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 106 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream as if you'll live forever
live as if you'll die tomorrow

sorry it posted my words twice, i dont know why it does that! one typo i just caught thats important is "rythm" not "rythme" lol that doesnt makes sense. sorry! im such a sloppy typer

on May. 14 2011 at 5:30 pm
OriginalCarbonation GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 106 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream as if you'll live forever
live as if you'll die tomorrow

i completly relate to this, very well written. i love the line "but i never left the floor" and "walking away, leaving nothing but your shadow"

i like how unique your writting is. however the one thing that seems to put me off is the use of punctuation. i think maybe different punctuation might be better in certain places. for instance your usage of "..." is a little odd to me. then again it does lend a certain feeling and off beat rythme to the words so you may have done that on purpse. im just pointing it out, as it is unusual.

however like i said, this is really well written. some amazing images etc. lovely!


Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 3 2011 at 4:36 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

My pleasure! Thank you so much for such amazing supporting comment! I let my heart take control when I write, and obviously it has reached yours! 

ckycky22 GOLD said...
on May. 3 2011 at 9:11 am
ckycky22 GOLD, Centerville, Iowa
11 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hello sun! You look like a unicorn!!"

your enthusiasm amazes me, very inspiring work, i think your writings are my muse :D


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