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All Dreams End

Your love was a whisper
Trailing wisps of dreams through my soul
My heartbeat, all aflutter,
Kept me warm in winter's cold
Though I did not understand
Why you chose me, above all
Your answer was always, "Why not?"
In a drawl

Your lullaby of desires
Sang me to sleep each night
I wish you were still
A part of my life
"Goodnight, my darling."
You would say with care
I cannot believe
Why you're not still there

Lightning bugs fly
Golden and silver
Storming the skies
Clouds darken in shivers
The sunlight overhead
Runs out of time
Though this happens
Only in my mind

I see just darkness
A terrible sensation
I feel no happiness
No more elation
And all because
You left me then
This nightmare is the now
That dream was the end



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Monkee63 said...
Mar. 24, 2011 at 9:42 am:
I really like this...the way it flows, the word choice...I just overall really like it Great Job. Keep writing :)
 
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ClarinetNinja14 said...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 9:09 pm:

I like this poem. I love your choice of word, it shows a sort of blossoming talent and really act as a window to show us your feelings. 

And, could you please do me a favor and tell me how long it takes before the editors accept/decline work? And if they DO decline it, will they notify me?

Thanks ;D an again, i think this is a phenomenal work of art. Keep up the great work!

 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Mar. 24, 2011 at 9:23 am :

Thanks so much :)

I don't really know. I've only been a member for the past couple of months. For my work, it's taken anywhere from 5 to 20 days or so. I'm not sure if they'll notify you upon declining, as none of mine has been declined so far, but I assume that they would let you know.

Thanks again for reading, and I'd love for you to comment on some of my other work if you have the time :)

 
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midnitewanderer said...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 8:31 pm:

I love this poem:)

"Though I did not understand why you chose me, above all Your answer was always, why not? In a drawl" <3

Your word choice/phrases is also very good----storming the skies, lullaby of desires, clouds darken in shivers.

The lightning bugs fly stanza is also pretty sweet! This is a very good poem.

If you've got some extra time on your hand please rate and comment my writing! Thanks!

Claire=)

 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Mar. 24, 2011 at 9:48 am :
Thank you, Claire! I'd love to :)
 
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HisPurePrincessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 1:16 pm:
Comment and rate my stuff please!  I really liked this btw, and I like all the WORDS.
 
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drmstarlet21 said...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 8:04 pm:
I just wanted to thank everyone for their comments as it means so much to me :) I would love it if you checked out some of my other work as well. Also, if there's anything of yours you would like to be read, I'd love to!
 
TeenageParadise_114 replied...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 8:53 am :
your welcome (: read YankeeSwagg"s poetry... she really needs some comments
 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 10:28 am :

Sounds good! I will do that when I can :) Carolina girls have to stick together!

My friend, whose username is DRMstarlet85, is relatively new to Teen Ink. She's talented; you should check her out :)

 
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I<3violin said...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 4:29 pm:
Great poem! I like the picture a lot too :D Keep writing!
 
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MissAnthrope said...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 1:15 pm:
this is an amazing piece of work! i feel the emotion coming off at me, i love it :)
 
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YankeeSwagg said...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 11:51 am:
I LOVEEEEE this poem (: keep writing please (:
 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 8:07 pm :
I'm from NC, too :)
 
TeenageParadise_114 replied...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 8:52 am :
me three (: omg this is gonna be awesome...
 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 10:26 am :
:) x 3!! Wait, what is?
 
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emoducks said...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 7:32 am:
OMG! i loved this! this was an amazing piece :) 
 
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Lostandconfused said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 8:28 pm:
Omg that was beautiful! I love it
 
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adriannalovesanime said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 6:13 pm:
I really liked, good job(:
 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Mar. 22, 2011 at 8:08 pm :
Thanks, Adree :) I love anime, too! Have you posted any artwork on Teen Ink?
 
adriannalovesanime replied...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 5:26 am :
Welcome:3.Anime rocks!Yes I have work<3.
 
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