A Train Ride

February 15, 2011
I met you on the train,
heading downtown,
I remember the day was full of rain,
and I never thought I'd see you frown,

you smiled so wide,
your eyes ice blue,
I laughed so hard I cried,
but time flew,

it was a short ride,
and we filled it with chat,
but, we had to say our good-byes,
and I didn't see you after that.

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leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 6:44 pm
nice poem! it was short, but sweet. keep up the good work!
Raytheraym replied...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 7:20 pm
Thanks! :)
Paige101 said...
Mar. 24, 2011 at 4:27 pm
Your work is so amazing. I can't help but love it.
Raytheraym replied...
Mar. 24, 2011 at 5:25 pm
Thank you so much!
HaleyDRog. said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 12:53 pm
Wow, amazing! I loved everything about this piece starting with the rythum all the way to the story behind the words! Nice job.
Raytheraym replied...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 3:50 pm
Thanks! :D
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