Buried Alive

February 15, 2011
By tyster10 PLATINUM, Lawrenceville, Georgia
tyster10 PLATINUM, Lawrenceville, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
“Nobody can go back and start a new beginning, but anyone can start today and make a new ending.”
~ Maria Robinson


Bye, Bye
Wonderful sunshine
I love your warmth
I love your shine
Bye, Bye
My wonderful sunshine
I’m going under
Underground
I do not want too
But have no choice
I must leave
Without your voice
Goodbye wind
Goodbye sun
Goodbye my life
As I will die



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on Mar. 18 2011 at 10:40 pm
Roseyalia SILVER, Don&#39t Need To Know, California
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Favorite Quote:
Take my love, take my land, take me where I cannot stand. I don't care, I'm still free, you can't take the sky from me. Take me out to the black. Tell 'em I ain't coming back. Burn the land and boil the sea, but you can't take the sky from me.

I love the language you choose.  The repetiveness, as well as the almost childlike use of "Bye bye" make this a quite good poem.  However, I get the feeling that I'm missing something, like there's more to it, like a backstory.


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