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Just Another Dead " I Love You"

How was I supposed to know
you did not really mean it.

How would I know
you were just another
sack of lies.

You thought this was a
game you played my heart.

Well thanks for nothing
the words were said too often
so it cut even deeper
now I see
they were used to sugar coat things you could say.

Nothing real about them
just another dead I love you
to write in my book
titled Alone and Stupid.

I fell for it again
I just can't believe it.

Just another
dead I love you...
nothing special.



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B-Artistic said...
Feb. 13, 2012 at 6:56 am
just another deep one.... wow..
 
yungwill said...
Dec. 8, 2011 at 9:16 am
that is very deep i really like it 
 
Mrs.Darcy replied...
Dec. 8, 2011 at 9:29 am
Thanks, I really appreciate it.
 
Fayrouz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 11, 2011 at 5:48 pm
I like the idea of a "Dead "I love you""...overall, the poem was deep with emotion. poetically, however, I think it could have improved with better word choice and poem qualities. The emotion is already there and strong, but you can strengthen it with stronger words! Good job and keep writing!
 
ADifferentKindOfPrincess replied...
Nov. 14, 2011 at 8:47 am
It was one of my first poems...I may build another one off of this one, but I will not change it... I think I wrote it in '06
 
ADifferentKindOfPrincess replied...
Nov. 14, 2011 at 8:48 am
I would have been 8 then. I wasn't really worried about being poetic back then, I just wanted to write.
 
sunny.all.day. said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 7:55 pm
My favorite line in this is "to write in my book/titles Alone and Stupid." The flow is a bit choppy but the emotions feel really raw. Oh gosh. I feel like an english teacher. bleh. well, Good job! 
 
ADifferentKindOfPrincess said...
Oct. 28, 2011 at 9:55 am

Thanks everybody!

 

 
J4Yc3 replied...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 5:09 pm

amazing job

 

 
SoulName said...
Mar. 6, 2011 at 10:08 am
i love this simply because i feel im right their with you
 
MorningStar15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 5, 2011 at 7:52 pm
I love the emotion, you really display it well! it reallt gets the attention of the reader, and makes them feel it too.
 
Mayim12 said...
Mar. 5, 2011 at 5:55 pm
Simple. <3
 
jcampgirl said...
Mar. 5, 2011 at 1:26 pm
i love this it is varry deap, i under stand and relate to it. thanks for posting
 
Mz.Minny2011 said...
Mar. 5, 2011 at 12:59 pm
looove this!!!!
 
M.Kimmi said...
Mar. 4, 2011 at 4:20 pm
LOVELY descriptions about lies! :DDD
 
HannSawyer17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 4, 2011 at 6:55 am
I like it! :)
 
ADifferentKindOfPrincess replied...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 11:36 am
Thanks. All of you are so amazing!
 
SuNshiNe007 replied...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 8:31 am
I love this! Great Job. And I know I say that alot! Now I have to ask!! Have you ever thought of maybe writing a poetry book?? You are just so good! I think not only people on this site but people all over should have the chance to read your work! I believe your writings help anyone who reads your work!!:) I have written and gotten poems published in books before and it is amazing how people change once they read what someone writes!
 
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