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i'm only gonna write this once,
so pay close attention and
don't read it again later:

i'm starting to wish that
rain would fall from clouds
instead of taunting us with buoyancy,
reach down and connect us
with waterways
paths erased by tomorrow's sun

and you could build a boat
and i could build a boat
and we could send our thoughts
in gondolas instead of
rotting them in a drawer
drying unsent messages
waiting for a call.

i'm starting to wonder if
crossing the world would change you
so you'd long for sun instead of
rain, want to paint your face gold
and pretend it's a mask,
blind with preconceptions and
deaf to clichés

and that's why i want it to rain.
('cause maybe then we'd know.)
and i've always wanted to build a boat.
and i can't finish my thoughts
without a conduit to yours.
(can you tell?)

i'm starting to change my
ways, stop wishing on stars
and bits of poetry, start
making things happen. i'm
fabricating a gondola in my attic and i'm
calculating the paths a river would take.

(can you hear my raindance?)





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Notapoet said...
Mar. 4, 2011 at 3:47 pm
I liked this poem very much but found the first stanza a bit harsh and out of character with the rest.  Absolutely loved the last 2 stanzas and last line.  "I can't finish my thoughts without a conduit to yours." is brilliant and gives me goosebumps.
 
Lise replied...
Mar. 4, 2011 at 5:07 pm
That was part of the spontaneous beauty of it -- the juxtaposition of an almost defensiveness in the beginning, followed by the intimate revelations. Very human.
 
Lise said...
Mar. 3, 2011 at 5:01 pm
Absolutely beautiful. A sophisticated structure that reads fluidly and seemingly effortlessly. Thanks.
 
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